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Updated many small typos in Two Perspectives (my first effort) and reposted. Email if you are an editor that would be interested in giving feedback. I have a second story about ready to publish, and a third that is roughly blocked out.
October 16, 2020
I just finished posting my first story - Two Perspectives - and see that the final chapter (the epilogue) is now published to the site. It is my first attempt at any kind of writing and it ended up being a bit more ambitious than I originally intended! It clocks in at over 20K words, or ~40 pages in Word.
If you haven't read it, please do! Afterward, I would love to hear your feedback.
As it was my first attempt at writing a story, I'm sure there are some likely weak spots, but figured (hoped!) that I got the story to a fairly solid state, and if I didn't just publish it I would spend forever editing and possibly never get it online.
I hope the story hung together and the characters were engaging enough that any short comings in style or execution did not deter from your overall enjoyment!
I know if I went back to edit the story in a week or two there are some areas that could probably use some work:
1) It may have been a poor choice for a first-timer, but I chose to write alternating chapters in the first person, starting with "hers" and then "his" (hence the title, Two Perspectives). In early drafts I occasionally switched to the third person and had to go back and modify the text. An inadvertent "hers" or "his" likely made it to publication instead of "my."
I also struggled in a few places to keep the story strictly in the first person so I tried to indicate a change of perspective with an in-page break ("+++") then another break when returning to the fist person.
2) I tried to be careful with tense, but after reading and rereading so many times I'm sure I wrote a mixed tense sentence or two (or ...) somewhere in the 40 pages.
3) The erotica! Trying to write a story was a challenge, but trying to write the erotica was a bit harder than expected. Like above, I hope it was passable and didn't detract from the overall story.
Again, if you have any feedback on the story I would be grateful to hear it! This story is literally hot-off-the-press as I waited to see it go "live" before posting a blog entry.
I have some ideas that I am toying with for a sophomore effort and would appreciate feedback that may help me avoid the same errors in the future.
-DF
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