Contraband will continue, but real life is getting in the way for now...
Okay. After I re-read what I posted on chapter 11, and discovered all of the minor errors, I've decided that from here on out- I'll be using one of SOL's volunteer editors to help me out.
Yep. That's right. None of the women will continue to have three hands in a sex scene! No longer will Rod refer to himself as I and me consecutively in the same sentence!
Well, at least, that's my hope.
Chapter 11 steered clear of sex. I needed Rod to be sex-free for a while, which is why he ended up with the 30 women orgy in Chapter 10. Hopefully, this worked for you.
Chapter 12 promises to be the darkest chapter thus far, but that's all I'm saying. It may end up being Chapter 13 that's the dark one, depending on how wordy 12 becomes.
I do want to thank everyone that is suggesting things that Rod should do or accomplish. It's very thrilling for me to realize that people are willing to invest in a few minutes of thought for what really is just a wank-off fantasy of mine.
I got some great emails after this last chapter. Lots of suggestions and warnings. Most of these I had thought through, but several ideas sparked new ones in me. For this, I thank you for your feedback.
I'm thinking that, now that he's back to work and has re-entered the real world, and Metacompanion is on the verge to do as well - I'm wondering if I should start over again, and name the next chapter: Part II, Chapter 1.
Actually, I'm not sure if the submission wizard allows for that. I gotta dig around s'more.
-smokeroom
Okay, since most comments and question I'm getting come from the storiesonline anonymizor, I'll answer some here.
Email 1: From "Anonymous"
You really need a plot. Do you have one in you ?
I have a vague outline. I'm not in any hurry to get there. This is my first ever attempt to write fiction, and what you're reading is basically the pages as they come out of the typewriter. So, it's a first draft of a first attempt. It's gonna be verbose, since I'm just discovering my own voice through words here.
I have several endings. None wrap up the story into a neat little bow. Every little neat bow I've thought up with conforms with one or another standard convention.
This is a story with robots, time travel, and dangerous technology in the hands of a novice. All three of those themes have been plumbed thoroughly in the past, and thus I'm hoping to avoid a plot that feels clichéd.
Rod will soon be cheating in Vegas, which I'm already feeling is a bit of a too-easy story point.
I may be challenging myself a bit too much for my first attempt at fiction. But I'm enjoying the ride.
Email 2: from multiple sources, only one quoted
Chapters are too short. It seems like a rip off
when you wait days for stuff and then there is
only two pages. I realize we don't pay but darn
it.
Chapter 9 and 10 should have been a single chapter. I was over-tired and felt the need to post something when I posted chapter 9. I regretted it this morning, and spent more time on 10 today than I really should have alloted for myself.
But since I got this from several sources, I'll take it under advisement. The next chapters will be longer, which, of course means that there will be a longer wait between updates.
I think part of me wanted to rack up the hits to my story by having it at the top of the "updates" page several times a week. But at the expense for story and satisfied readers. I'll try to do better here on out.
Email #3: from some Gnome dude
I laughed out loud when the answer to how to get
money turned out to be "as a stripper." I sat and
thought hard for about 10 minutes the other day,
and couldn't think of a single way to snag some
money. Duh!
The fact that anyone is spending 10 minutes pondering logistics of my silly little fantasy is pretty freakin' cool.
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Also, thanks to those of you who gave me advice on how to make my sex scenes better. I hope you notice some improvement in the future.
I think Rod's character is going to have to desire group sex a little less from now on. With that last chapter, I discovered that writing an orgy scene is much like doing a radio play-by-play of a ballet performance.
And while part of me wants this to be successful as a harem stroke story, I've found that there's only so many ways to write who's genitals are being touched by whom before even I, the writer, loses track of the scene unfurling.
So, any feedback you'd like to leave me on the sex scenes (too long, too gratuitous, not long enough, too many women, not enough women, etc.) will be taken into consideration.
I've got about the next month in Rod's life planned out in my mind. Of course, I'm already on Chapter 8 and only 2 days have transpired. So, if I keep this going, it's gonna be a freakin' novel by the time I'm done.
I only have the vaguest ideas for a conclusion to the story right now. I have scenes and thought out various consequences those scenes may have, each of which could lead this story down a different path. We'll see which storyline wins out, eventually.
Once again, thanks to everyone who's taken their hands out of their pants long enough to send me some feedback. I'm pleased that my first attempt at fiction, with essentially my first draft being published as I write it, has generated mostly a positive response. Your emails have been the kick in the ass I need to keep writing, so thanks.
....eventually.
There's a lot of exposition in this chapter. Stuff that I'd worked out in my mind over and over. So much so, that I'm finding it to be a real chore to actually write.
So bear with me...I hope to have it up in a day or two.