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Wanted: Girl for Experiments: Safety not guaranteed

Eddie Davidson ๐Ÿšซ
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Here is the premise:

Story is written from a young woman's perspective. She is barely making it by driving Uber and Door Dash. She has a decent body/face but fairly obvious low self-esteem. She is not dating anyone and the last few guys she met on dating apps turned out to be losers with no desire for commitment.

She reads an ad on Craigslist (Is that a thing anymore? maybe some other site where people can put weird ads or start the timeline earlier before it shut down)

"Wanted: Girl for experiments. Must be healthy, and over 18. Safety is not guaranteed. 50 an hour."

She laughs.

She has seen ads for strippers, nude models, nude housecleaners, nude lawnmowing services, prostitutes, and even guys wanting to set up gangbangs.

She's never answered them. She isn't a prude but she just had no interest.

However, there is something about this ad that piques her curiousity simply because of how bizarre and brief it is. What kind of experiments? She pictures a mad scientist in a white labcoat trying to harness lightning bolts to power his infernal machine like in science fiction.

She contacts the person on the other end. She writes several questions and a little about herself (but not her home address/real name). He provides an adress and a time and nothing else. He doesn't ask for a picture, or provide any details.

The first chapter deals with her being apprehensive, nervous and driving there twice before the time just to see what kind of place it is. It isn't a business or labratory. It is a brick building with no signs out front. It appears to have been a clothing store that was abandoned 1980s.

SCENARIO ONE:

The first experiment (whatever it is) is really not that bad and she makes 100 bucks. It wasn't much but it was over pretty quick. WE could even say she was knocked out for it, so she felt like she walked in, got undressed and walked out.

The doctor is creepy/strange but when she jokingly asks where his white labcoat is, he puts one on.

Due to her low self-esteem she has this sort of "why not" attitude about this entire thing. She is on the pill and thinks that if the guy tries something with her - that she'd really not mind.

The experiments could get increasingly weird. I don't know and I am looking for ideas. Could be as over the top as transformign her into a bimbo with huge tits/puffy lips, or even ahuman dog, or it could just be brutal/strange/freaky experiments to see how much electricity she can withstand.

It could also be that whatever happens, as she survives and is altered physically by each experiment, she is altered mentally as well by an increased confidence and growing self-esteem.

"If I was ever kidnapped and the guy tried to torture me, I'd probably ask him what else he has, because all of this has already been tried on me."

"Yes, yes, Mrs. Prescott. The subject will lie back and be silent now."

SCENARIO TWO:

Same as above, but she knows the person who wrote the ad. She never got his real name, he never got hers. She doesn't find out until she arrives

It could be her father - who is a brilliant researcher, and this is his part time job. Her mom doesn't know he does this.

He promises her 100 an hour if she'll assure him she won't tell her mom.

"Wait, you still want me to do the experiments?"

"Well, you need the money and you were going to do them anyway. What is the difference?"

Could be a former school mate who had the hots for her but she rebuffed him. She's forgotten or never even realized how obsessed he was with her. Her low self-esteem prevented her from even imagining someone would think that much of her. He still jerks off to her yearbook photos. The experiments could be similar, but along perhaps a darker path of retribution or alteration towards making her love him.

blackjack2145309 ๐Ÿšซ

@Eddie Davidson

Honestly, i think it sounds like you haven't figured out the "end goal" of this story yet. Which i can kind of relate to because i have the same problem with writing an ending to a werewolf related adventure to a harem story i'm writing.

Don't get me wrong the concept of this story does have potential i think....

Replies:   Eddie Davidson
Eddie Davidson ๐Ÿšซ

@blackjack2145309

If I had it planned and outlined I wouldn't have posted here for ideas and put options.

I'm looking to brainstorm or offer the idea to someone else.

Replies:   Dominions Son
Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@Eddie Davidson

If I had it planned and outlined I wouldn't have posted here for ideas and put options.

A journey requires a starting point and a destination. But you don't need a complete plan for how you are going to get there.

You don't need a complete outline of the middle (how you get from the start to the end) to know where you want a story to end (the destination).

blackjack2145309 ๐Ÿšซ
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@Eddie Davidson

I apologize, i meant no offense. To be honest i could see a story like this easily fit into a combination of sci-fi, mind control and/or horror genre.

Among the things i could suggest is first you need to describe the right kind of "freaky" elements as the MC enters where the experiment is taking place.

What i mean by "freaky" elements doesn't have to be too outlandish either. It could be a simple as an office full of women wearing the exact same piece of jewelry.

It just has to be enough to make the MC question whether or not it's worth the money.

As an ending i think the best way would be for one of the scientists watching the experiment press a button on a console and saying "could i get someone from maintenance to come up and clean up room 4, we also need another test subject sent."

Replies:   Eddie Davidson
Eddie Davidson ๐Ÿšซ
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@blackjack2145309

No offense taken. Tone of voice is hard to convey on the forum. I appreciate the advice

I was just trying to make sure i was clear i was soliciting ideas. You are right that it can run the gamut if frankenslut macabre to fun tests that stretch her pussy and give her lots of orgasms

I like your ending.

I would add that the scientist only imagines that a team is set up to clean the lab. He has been pressing that button and requesting assistants and maintenance for months and the building is empty save him. He always had a tenuous grasp on reality.

JoeBobMack ๐Ÿšซ

@Eddie Davidson

In the spirit of developing ideas:

*The very clearest part of your idea is the weird ad, which is interesting - a hook to get things started. (Reminds me a little of the ad in Heinlein's Glory Road.)

*The second clearest, but with even more data points is the female MC.

You have a hint of where she might be by the end - more self-confident, or perhaps developed in some way.

Would it help to develop the story if you maybe wrote a little more about your MC as she is at the beginning, then write about where she is at the end?

*At the beginning, what does she want most?

*Does she have any desires or beliefs that aren't clear even to herself that might surface during the story, either to drive the action or to be changed so she can move forward?

*Do we care about her just for her - the character story, or does her personal story matter in the bigger story world? Think the difference between Pride and Prejudice and Harry Potter.

*Where is she at the end? What does she have that she didn't have at the beginning? How has her life changed?

If, on the other hand, the MC isn't the focus of the story, but rather what is done to her (which also seems to be hinted at in your scenarios) then these questions aren't going to be helpful, but maybe the process of thinking about them will help clarify what the story is about - what gets done to her, or why (revenge, mad scientist, whatever).

Replies:   Eddie Davidson
Eddie Davidson ๐Ÿšซ
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@JoeBobMack

These are great questions. I think the challenge would be simply deciding where you want to go with a very open premise.

And also might be important to decide how over the top or how realistic and grounded in reality you want the story to be. Then the transformation would be a little more clear. However I have been seeing some people who have done some pretty extreme things in reality

Replies:   JoeBobMack
JoeBobMack ๐Ÿšซ

@Eddie Davidson

< GRIN! > I think we're playing hot potato. I was suggesting questions to you! But, I appreciate your willingness to put the idea out there. Like I said, the ad part catches my attention, although I'm pretty reluctant to write a female lead character. I think that's real hard for a guy to get right, especially if the story calls for being inside the MC's head to account for why she responds to the ad and how the arc of the story affects her character.

Of course, that said, I'm writing female characters - no way around it in my story, or in most stories for that matter, but as the MC for this kind of story? Yabba!

Radagast ๐Ÿšซ

@Eddie Davidson

It helps to visualize characters. Here's the OG MC of the safety not guaranteed meme:

https://knowyourmeme.com/memes/safety-not-guaranteed

fungirl133 ๐Ÿšซ

@Eddie Davidson

She goes to work in a medical research lab. Ovaries altered bred with a chimpanzee

Replies:   blackjack2145309
blackjack2145309 ๐Ÿšซ

@fungirl133

O.o uhhh............wow.......

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