Forum: Story Ideas

Help With A Story Idea

jcourson50 🚫

I have an pretty complete shell of a story and would like to find somebody who could help turn it into a full fledged story by adding dialog and other details. I'll confess up front that I am not a writer, but I think I have the full basics (beginning, middle, and ending) with enough specifics of a good story. I just need a real writers touch to make it complete.

Story codes would include group, teens, mother/daughter, reluc(?) and impreg

If those codes appeal to anybody who might like play around with my ideas, shoot me a message.

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graybyrd 🚫

@jcourson50

Sorry to rain on your parade, but story ideas are like creditors. Everybody's got as much of 'em as they want. Its pretty much an 'every man for 'imself' type of thing. Why don't you have a go at it? No excuses accepted.

BlacKnight 🚫

What graybyrd said. It's NaNoWriMo, after all. You've got an idea? Give us 50,000 words on it by the 30th.

Redsliver 🚫

@jcourson50

I'll confess up front that I am not a writer

But you will be if you write it.

jcourson50 🚫

I've written about 1200 words that outline the plot, but everything I try that is dialog or description is so hokey it ruins what I think is a hot idea

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awnlee jawking 🚫

@jcourson50

I've written about 1200 words that outline the plot, but everything I try that is dialog or description is so hokey it ruins what I think is a hot idea

If you think it sounds hokey, you're halfway to solving the problem. Keep on experimenting until you find something you're comfortable with. It's very difficult to come up with something completely new so you're bound to find examples of how other authors have dealt with the situation.

Or, if you're really brave, you could publish what you've written, including the hokey stuff, and ask readers to send you constructive criticism.

AJ

Remus2 🚫

@jcourson50

I've written about 1200 words that outline the plot, but everything I try that is dialog or description is so hokey it ruins what I think is a hot idea

You expect to be an expert first time out? It doesn't matter if you're building cabins or writing a story, no one is an expert the first time they do any given thing.

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joyR 🚫

@Remus2

no one is an expert the first time they do any given thing

'ex' is something that has been.
'pert' is used to describe a young lady's attractive well formed nipples on 'high beam'

With age and experience, but mostly age, those high beams dip until they are down-lights for her slippers.

I do NOT want to be an expert... :)

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Dominions Son 🚫

@joyR

an ex-spurt is a former drip.

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joyR 🚫

@Dominions Son

an ex-spurt is a former drip.

A spurt is a drip under pressure...

:)

awnlee jawking 🚫

@joyR

'pert' is used to describe a young lady's attractive well formed nipples on 'high beam'

That sounds counter-intuitive to me. Doesn't pert normally suggest on the small side? Pert breasts don't dangle to the waist, the pert girl next door isn't six feet tall, so pert nipples shouldn't be poking out like organ stops.

Of course, as a man, my opinion doesn't count in this area.

AJ

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joyR 🚫

@awnlee jawking

Pert breasts don't dangle to the waist,

Absolutely correct..!!

However, expert ones do, even if they aren't large enough to 'dangle' like those big hooters you dream of... :)

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awnlee jawking 🚫

@joyR

those big hooters you dream of... :)

I'm a minimalist ;)

AJ

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joyR 🚫

@awnlee jawking

I'm a minimalist ;)

Speech impediment or just motor boating ???

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awnlee jawking 🚫

@joyR

motor boating

I've never understood who is supposed to get pleasure from that act. Is it a domination thing? Do women motor-boat each other?

AJ

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joyR 🚫

@awnlee jawking

I've never understood who is supposed to get pleasure from that act. Is it a domination thing? Do women motor-boat each other?

I've always thought of it as a something an immature guy would do. Well that and something a certain type of author might use

Hardly a domination thing as it's not that far removed from blowing raspberries on a baby's tummy

I've never heard of, or experienced it used between women

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awnlee jawking 🚫

@joyR

I've always thought of it as a something an immature guy would do. Well that and something a certain type of author might use

Hardly a domination thing as it's not that far removed from blowing raspberries on a baby's tummy

Thanks.

I found one website claiming that women could derive pleasure from being motor-boated, but it didn't go as far as explaining how or why.

Would anyone care to pose my questions on mumsnet? ;)

AJ

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Dominions Son 🚫

@awnlee jawking

but it didn't go as far as explaining how or why.

My understanding from what I've read different women have different levels of general physical sensitivity in the breasts and derive different levels of sexual stimulation from stimulation of the breast.

Some women can reach orgasm just from rubbing or having someone else rub their breasts. I would imagine such women would get something out of it.

as it's not that far removed from blowing raspberries on a baby's tummy

I've know adult couples who did the raspberry thing on each other, and no, it wasn't a sexual thing for them as far as I could tell.

Dominions Son 🚫

@joyR

Do your tits hang low?
Do they wobble to and fro?
Can you tie 'em in a knot?
Can you tie 'em in a bow?
Can you throw 'em over your shoulder
Like a continental (regimental) soldier
Do your tits hang low?

https://genius.com/Traditional-do-your-ears-hang-low-lyrics

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joyR 🚫

@Dominions Son

When Dolly Parton was young and poor she used two buckets and a yard of rope.

No, you dirty minded swine... She fetched water with them...!!

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Dominions Son 🚫

@joyR

When Dolly Parton was young and poor she used two buckets and a yard of rope.

No, you dirty minded swine... She fetched water with them...!!

And here I thought it was because she couldn't find off the shelf bra's large enough.

StarFleet Carl 🚫

@joyR

When Dolly Parton was young and poor she used two buckets and a yard of rope.

No, you dirty minded swine... She fetched water with them...!!

I went to a Kenny Rogers concert about 30 years ago. He was talking about touring with Dolly and during practices for their performances, they had two spotlights on them when they were standing together. Then when they split up on stage, one was supposed to follow him, the other her. But they both stayed on her. After this happened a couple of times, he went up into the scaffolding overhead to talk to the lighting guys about this. Then he saw WHY both spotlights stayed on Dolly's headlights ...

Dominions Son 🚫

Another option would be to find a friend willing to roll play scenes from the story with you to get a more natural sounding dialog.

jcourson50 🚫

After getting feedback from a couple of SOL authors, I've developed this story idea into a sort of movie treatment that lays out the cast and nine scenes of action. Each scene I think would stand alone as its own sort of vignette. Together, I think it would make a nice story in more talented hands.

Neither of the authors who provided feedback (which I very much appreciated) did so to take a crack at actually writing it as a complete story. My go at it (complete with incredibly trite dialog) did not seem inspire.

Anybody who might be inspired to take a crack at it by the treatment version I've worked on, feel free to DM me.

J

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