Forum: Story Ideas

I plan to write this story when I get older or study how to write story enough in english (you will notice how my poor english below). So i will write this story at some point since im just 23 years old. Plus, I can refine the ideas here with everyone comment :)

The earth runs out of resource to sustain the human, and the land is tainted with radiation and dangerous substances. Before those thing happened and war began, four billionaires spent all their fortune to build a giant spaceship in the space called Icarus. They gathered everything like animals, fertile soil, fuel and millions of people.

The central theme about this story are about materialism and Virus(Nano-tech).

The virus also determine the citizen level

Alpha Virus: Only Four billionaire got this virus and their descendants.it enhances healing, endurance, intelligience and free of diseases. Can make people live for hundreds of years

Omega Virus: No special characteristic. Rather as a means to control people. Every people will get this virus. The dark effect will activate after people reach 15 years old. After that, they need to drink the bio-water. It works as a fuel for those virus to keep going. After reaching 15 years old, people need to drink the bio water every 24 hour. They will die instantly after 24 hours without the water.

Delta virus: Can only be bought. It is an upgraded from Omega. It is very costly. Rather than 24 hours, people will lives for a year without drinking the water.

Beta Virus: Free of disease, Enhance of Healing. The most expensive one. Cost more than 10 Billion Units(currency).

It makes the person live for a few hundred years.

The spaceship has 3 floors, which are Babylon,The Garden, and The Pit. Delta, Belta and Alpha people live in Babylon, while Omega live in the pit.

The Garden is where the crops grows. This is where food will be produced.

The whole spaceship is controlled by a single intelligence computer called the Eye. The Eye control food producing machine, the Keeper robot to keep order and take care of crops. It also creates artificial weathers at Babylon and the garden as well. For this reason, food producing needs only a small amount of people to help.

The Babylon people have jobs like normal earth society ,while, the Pit people work as servants, hookers, and low end jobs. However, even those jobs are very selective since those jobs are hired at Babylon. And people at Babylon are very discriminated toward lower citizen. which means the majority will work as the recycler of junks at the Pit.

The food is limited since there will be bad decades of harvest when soil needs to recover in a very long period of time. So they need to control the population or reduce it down.

When people have children, the children will have their own allowance until they reach 15 years.

To control the polutaion, there is a battle coliseum once a year that any people can register when they reach 15 years of age. There are no limited of participants. Since the place is big, and it is a deathmatch. The promise of becoming the Delta Citizen and living at Babylon make people eager to join in order to escape the Pit life.

The second method is to inflate the price of the water which will make the water more expensive to buy. It is use when the harvest suffers the dry decades.

The POV character will be one of the descendant of the Four. The Four will have authority over everything even the Eye, except toward another of the Four. They can use the Order of robots to kill any citizen without question. History: there was a rebellion to stop the use of virus which results of the massacre by the Keeper . More than half of Pit and babylon was slaughtered. This was order by the Four. The Four only allows to have one child only, in order to keep from internal power struggling. The child will put into coma after they reach 15 years of age which they will put into the capsule that freeze the aging process. They will be woken up when their parents dead. This is to make those children grow on their own, as well as again to stop power struggling and such. Usually, the father or mother will die from the dying of alpha virus which is unpredictable when they have lived more than hundred of years.

The story begins when the boy of the Four woke up when his father got assassinated which is a rare occurrence.

The boy will disguise himself as Omega, and hunt down the truth and go down to the pit and accidentally participate in the coliseum to find the truth, and uncover the darker side of corrupted people in the Babylon who want to take over Icarus.

Well, this story is in my head for years, it feels good to let it off. I guess it is like a prologue or something.

That's the problem about talking about it. Now the pressure to actually write it will either go away or at least be less.

while I never read your story, I am going to read it to satisfied my nerdy science fiction thing. :D

About the alpha virus, I can say that this idea came or got inspired from Resident Evil series. G-Virus and T-Virus. However, the alpha virus doesnt give any super human strength like Alice in the Movie at all. But, it gives only high resilience to injury and physical exhaustion.

Class struggle stories are always popular, because people like to see underdogs topple people in charge who are, of course, evil (in varying degrees from "working actively to keep the underdogs down" to merely "not caring enough about the plight of the underdogs"). Scifi is also useful for this since it gives you more license to create such a system and justification for it to exist.

If there is something the reader has to know to understand the story, perhaps you can spice up the chapter/prolog/prequel you present it in with the two standbys, sex and violence. Lights, Camera, ACTION.

Thank you guys, for amazing feedback. I'm very much appreciate it.

For science fiction and other related items. My suggestion is not to explain the science or technology too much. Instead give logical reasons for a character's understanding or use of the knowledge and or technology.
Refer to their schooling or training in some form. Mention how tough it was in Math or other aspects. Unless it falls into a scientific law that will never change don't use try to give too much detail, just give logical reasons for the character's knowledge and usage of the science or technology. Just look at how school subjects have changed in just the last 30 years or so at the primary levels let alone at the college or university levels.

Its funny how the questions tend to stay the same over the years, but the correct answers change.