I'm currently reading Sleepwalker by Shadow of Moonlite, and I just got so frustrated that I had to write a little rant. I've currently read 48 chapters in, the chapter where MC and Angela goes on a date.
First of all, a minor situation in the beginning, where the mother is talking to MC and his sister about their relationship and says it's fine for now but if Allison ever wants to have kids they can't have them with each other, the only option is to split up or maybe adopt a kid. Now I am no expert on incest, all my knowledge about it comes from other stories on this site more or less, but in all other incest stories I remember, it's always been the case that incest birth defects are mostly a myth, as long as both the parents are healthy. I said that this was a minor issue because I don't really know the facts, and this story might be the one that got it right, but it felt more like a setup for relationship drama between MC and Allison. I mean, means like artificial insemination were not even mentioned, even if they biologicaly can't have a kid together, they wouldn't have to split up because Allsion wants to carry one herself.
Now the second issue I have, and this is what made me snap and write this rant, is the part where Angela wants to thank MC for getting her together with her brother. First of all, if you want to thank your friend (who you don't love, and you know that he's happily in love with 2 girls he's in a steady relationship with), you don't potenially ruin his relationship by trying to have him cheat on them. Because that's what she's doing, she hasn't talked to either Allison or Shannon to come to some sort of understanding before trying to get together with him. It really ticks me off that she's doing something that would potentially ruin the relationship with the loves of his life because she's feeling grateful. She has no idea that Allison would be okay with MC 'saying you're welcome' when she's 'thanking him'. So the point is that this situation shouldn't even exist, unless Angela is a very egocentric person, which until now I didn't have the impression that she was.
Then we have how everyone else is reacting to this situation. Everyone (his mom, Allison, Bob, Shannon) is acting like he has no choice in the matter. They all say it would be reaaaally bad if he rejected her, almost as if it would be traumatic, that someone as beautiful as her would never be rejected by someone like him. He's in a relationship with 2 women he really love, he has every right to say no, and she has no right at all to expect him to respond to her advances. Most people that are in a loving relationship are 'off the market' and wouldn't sleep with someone else, even if she's a model. Yet everyone seems to expect real bad consequences for her if he would reject her, when in reality she should have no reason to expect him to agree to sleep with her. Then we have the fact that Allison was alright with him sleeping with her 'to say you're welcome'. Yet when they where in her car he said that he didn't want to sleep with her because she felt obliged to. Eventually she agrees and say she doesn't want to fuck him, but they want to make love to each other, and not because of any obligations.
So to sum it up I found this whole sequence really odd:
* The situation shouldn't even exist because no friend would ask him to do what she wants to do with him.
* Everyone seems to believe it's perfectly natural and acceptable for her to sleep with him as thanks for some advice, there are no other ways she could thank him at all that's concidered.
* Even though the reason Allison gave him that said it was ok with him sleeping with her, to accept her thanks, MC refuse to do that and tells her that he will only sleep with her because both of them wants it. This really came out of the blue since MC seems to be perfectly happy with Allison and Shannon, and should really have no reason to sleep with Angela, and then he himself removes the one reason that Allison has given him, but still wants to sleep with her.
Also, I really hope Tim won't be 'thanking' Allison while Angela is 'thanking' MC. Other than my complaints in my rant, I've really liked this story but the thing I hate the most in erotic stories is swinging. The story doesn't have the swinging tag, so I hope it won't come to that, but it wouldn't be the first time such tags are omitted from the story description.
I don't really expect a discussion about this, I'm just really frustrated at this whole scene that is so unnatural and out of place, so I had to write off my thoughts on the matter. English is not my first language, apologies about all my grammatic and spelling errors.