Forum: Story Discussion and Feedback

I would guess that "406" is the author "Writer 406" but I don't know which story he refers to. Every one of that author's stories begins with a paragraph that sets the scene and that includes the protagonist.

opening remarks are in one of the styles where statements are made that have no immediate context in an effort to set a scene instead of using descriptive prose

This description seems to fit an opening paragraph like

There are some things man was never meant to know.

which is typical of H.P. Lovecraft in the 1920s. That is not new, nor unique to SOL.

So, I concur with Switch Blayde. al_3, please give examples of the two features that bother you and explain what you find grating about them.

While 406's writings are incredibly annoying, I went back and studied the old masters to relearn those summary descriptions of the story that's about to be told. Yet the whole point of those is that those are merely a preamble of the story, not a part of the actual story, simply an opening summary of what's to be covered, which is the basis of my paragraphs: this is what you're about to read, here are the details, this is what you've just read.

Again, when you study speed-reading, you're taught to use those summary statements to select what's worth reading and what's likely a waste of your time reading, since it's already summarized for you.

I've used those fairly extensive in my writing, but only later on, having seen in done in those older tales (i.e. Dickens does it extensively).

There are some things man was never meant to know.

This is a very inviting phrase to me. What's not to like about learning what those things we were never meant to know really are?

I mean, the list is long. In the context of much SOL writing, several things come to mind---what color are her panties? how big is his cock? how many times can she orgasm? how many times can he orgasm? what happened in the barn, and how many sheep were involved?

Sorry, but I like opening phrases like that.

~ JBB

There are some things man was never meant to know

How to iron? How to put the toilet seat down after use? How to use the washing machine/dishwasher? :-)

AJ

At one point I was the single male in a house with three women, and how to put the toilet seat down became a critical piece of knowledge with serious sanctions for failure to learn.

You could add how to wash clothes without shrinking them to the list, too.

~ JBB

You could add how to wash clothes without shrinking them to the list, too.

But the professionals (ie women) know how to shrink clothes deliberately so they're so skin-tight they need talcum powder to ease them on.

AJ

But the professionals (ie women) know how to shrink clothes deliberately so they're so skin-tight they need talcum powder to ease them on.

There can be a happy ending sometimes.My son-in-law is a beanpole 6-footer who had a heavy over shirt that looked really good on him. On a visit to me early this year, the professional (I.E., a woman) he's married to accidentally shrank it. It now fits my granddaughter, eight going on nine with a long torso, perfectly.

~ JBB

There can be a happy ending sometimes.My son-in-law is a beanpole 6-footer who had a heavy over shirt that looked really good on him. On a visit to me early this year, the professional (I.E., a woman) he's married to accidentally shrank it. It now fits my granddaughter, eight going on nine with a long torso, perfectly.

See! They know what they're doing :-)

AJ

Not one of Writer 406's stories has the "AI Generated" tag.

Maybe Lazeez should have a look at them...

I suspect they'll be below Lazeez's AI detection threshold. And there has been a progressive improvement in seamlessly dovetailing in the AI parts with each new story.

Would the stories have scored so highly if naive readers had been warned about the AI content in the story tags? I'm like Grey Wolf in that I think each story should be judged on its merits alone, and yet I'd also want to know if the writer had used AI generation.

It's a difficult time to be running a site like this.

AJ

Conner's Story has, IMO, improved immeasurably since the opening. What AI content it contains is no reason to not recommend it. Give it a try if you haven't already.

AJ