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zitqhile ๐Ÿšซ

Reading Tendertouch"s story 'building a better past'.

In the third chapter he asks what happen to his ten year old self.

Just wondering if any story has answered this or did a story with the younger and older versions of the same person.

Most do over stories both die, one mind and one body to do the change.

Might be an interesting story if the younger mind lives in the older body, while the older mind lives in the younger body. The same person, not a freaky Friday version.

Replies:   madnige  MarissaHorne
madnige ๐Ÿšซ
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@zitqhile

a story with the younger and older versions

One that was on BtFH (so should hopefully arrive here soonish) is The road taken ... and taken by Bruce Bretthauer (Prince von Vlox here) and Colin Keezer (?sp), about a twenty-something heiress who gets swapped with a 10yo version of herself in another timeline; the viewpoints alternate between these characters, so it's a combination of a do-over and a 'do-under' (like A stitch in time)

The premier A stitch in time has been here for a long time, but only looks at a boy jumping forwards (the 'do-under').

Most do over stories both die

In Charlie Foxtrot's A New Past (premier) in the closing wrap-up, we get hints that rather than anybody dying, a whole new universe is created to hold the transferred mind.

Replies:   zitqhile  Dinsdale
zitqhile ๐Ÿšซ

@madnige

The road taken...and taken, seems like the closest to the idea.

Also a nice idea to add the premier label to stories.

Dinsdale ๐Ÿšซ

@madnige

Colin Keezer

I think that's Keizer.
He used to post political stuff on GMW's BtFH but then suddenly ceased all contact. I hardly ever read his posts so for all I know, there may have been something in there about a health problem.

MarissaHorne ๐Ÿšซ

@zitqhile

Lightning in a Bottle by Sage Mullins tells you of the history of the other personality of the time-travelling chatacter.

Replies:   zitqhile
zitqhile ๐Ÿšซ

@MarissaHorne

Have to read that one again. Right now about the only thing I remember of it, he was in a band and got knock out with a beer bottle before going back.

Replies:   madnige
madnige ๐Ÿšซ
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@zitqhile

Have to read that one again. Right now about the only thing I remember of it, he was in a band and got knock out with a beer bottle before going back.

Methinks you do need to read it again - from what I recall (from >5yr ago according to my browser history) he throws the bottle at a wall and it bounces off and lands (unbroken I think) on the floor, shortly before the lightning strike that sends him back. Another snippet I remember: he gets front row seats for his family to a World Series baseball game to be right next to a spectacular game-ending catch, only to see it fumbled. I had recorded the gig playlists, and this story introduced me to Edge of Seventeen and the Bangles version of Hazy Shade of Winter. I'll have to read it again, too.

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zitqhile ๐Ÿšซ

@madnige

I knew a bottle was in there somewhere. Think I also remember the lighting strike now also.

Was a main female character an enemy in the past life and became friends/more friendly when he went back?

Jadyn Rylee on youtube did a cover of Edge of Seventeen a couple years ago that is quite decent.

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madnige ๐Ÿšซ
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@zitqhile

Was a main female character an enemy in the past life and became friends/more friendly when he went back?

Absolutely - the MC recreated the band he was in at college for a talent show, actually one of his ex-bandmates suggested it, but it required a change in lineup to meet the entry rules so the MFC was brought in. She pulled a fast one with the paperwork, and walked off with the (2nd place?) prize money, which was what triggered throwing the bottle. This also coloured the MCs attitude to the MFC after going back, which took a while to resolve. Life rolls on, and eventually they reform the band for the talent show again, this time winning it.

ETA more snippets: The MC throws a temper tantrum on first remeeting the MFC and trashes one of hid frind's drums, an action he later describes as 'a dick move, of John Holmes proportions'; the reconciliation begins when he comes to the aid of a female student who is being assaulted and it turns out to be the MFC, this prevented assault having been the start of the MFCs slide downhill to the bitter and twisted character at the beginning; 1st time through the MC was an only child, 2nd he had a brother and sister; the MC has a dream of the time the timeline split, showing the MC and MFC meeting as infants (shades of Jay Cantrell's Learning Curves, but even younger) and explaining the siblings anomaly. A band member of the talent show displaced winners is also a returnee, and clues in the MC on the importance of keeping the bottle safe.

I'm going to have to reread it too.

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