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Switch Blayde ๐Ÿšซ

I just read an article about how the Phoenix Suns basketball team destroyed the LA Lakers in last night's game. (Grinning because I love the Suns and hate the Lakers.) The following sentence is in the article:

Saturday comes the real test for Phoenix: Golden State on Christmas Day.

When reading that sentence, I missed the colon so I had to stop when I read the incomplete sentence that followed it and then went back and saw the colon for it to make sense. If the colon had been an em-dash, I wouldn't have missed it. And I believe it would have been more impactful.

True, the article isn't a fiction story, but I believe it carries over to fiction.

Maybe it's just my love of the em-dash. Or maybe I can't resist the opportunity to mention the Suns beat the Lakers. LOL

Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

I have vision issues (extreme nearsightedness (20/400+) with astigmatism)

I had no trouble seeing the : on the first pass.

Ernest Bywater ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

Maybe it's just my love of the em-dash. Or maybe I can't resist the opportunity to mention the Suns beat the Lakers. LOL

both

Replies:   Vincent Berg
Vincent Berg ๐Ÿšซ

@Ernest Bywater

Maybe it's just my love of the em-dash. Or maybe I can't resist the opportunity to mention the Suns beat the Lakers. LOL

both

For authors, everything's sweeter with the occasional unusual punctuation (as it denotes something worth paying attention to for readers). It's even better than the uncommon unusual word, as they're usually skipped over (rather than looked up by curious readers).

Replies:   Pixy
Pixy ๐Ÿšซ

@Vincent Berg

For authors, everything's sweeter with the occasional unusual punctuation (as it denotes something worth paying attention to for readers). It's even better than the uncommon unusual word, as they're usually skipped over (rather than looked up by curious readers)

I would argue that it's actually the complete opposite. As both reader and dabbling writer, I tend to ignore all punctuation other than full stops and comma's. Apostrophes can go fuck themselves.

Unusual words, on the other hand, will have me either reaching for the dictionary (if handy) or Googling it.

Michael Loucks ๐Ÿšซ
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@Pixy

Apostrophes can go fuck themselves.

Showing possession without them could be left to context, but in some cases, they designate a meaning change:

its vs it's

That, too, could be contextual, but the tiny clue helps when I'm reading (I prefer the possessive apostrophe as well).

Could we ditch most of them? Use "dont" for "don't"? Probably. We manage in everyday speech to figure it out without punctuation.

Writing has always been more formal than everyday speech, and we follow the convention, or we risk being thought of as 'uneducated'. Wrong as that may be, it's true.

Replies:   awnlee jawking
awnlee jawking ๐Ÿšซ

@Michael Loucks

Could we ditch most of them? Use "dont" for "don't"? Probably. We manage in everyday speech to figure it out without punctuation.

In my neck of the woods, we pronounce "can't" and "cant" differently ;-)

Everyday speech has lots of extraverbal cues as to meaning. Writing may be more formal but it occupies a narrower bandwidth even with the addition of punctuation.

AJ

Replies:   Michael Loucks
Michael Loucks ๐Ÿšซ

@awnlee jawking

Everyday speech has lots of extraverbal cues as to meaning. Writing may be more formal but it occupies a narrower bandwidth even with the addition of punctuation.

The bane of writing is you can't express emotion the same way you can with speech. Yes, you can describe it, but speech has so many shortcuts in that regard.

awnlee jawking ๐Ÿšซ

@Michael Loucks

The bane of writing is you can't express emotion the same way you can with speech.

Very true.

Still, such challenges reward the better writers amongst us.

AJ

Ernest Bywater ๐Ÿšซ

@Michael Loucks

The bane of writing is you can't express emotion the same way you can with speech

Yes, and that's where the use of punctuation and text format can help a writer to convey emotions.

Replies:   Vincent Berg
Vincent Berg ๐Ÿšซ

@Ernest Bywater

Yes, and that's where the use of punctuation and text format can help a writer to convey emotions.

Which punctuation, or formatting, do you employ for someone rolling their eyes? Pauses, that's easy, you can also emphasize specific words, though you really can't modify how someone emphasizes things based on context.

Replies:   Ernest Bywater  madnige
Ernest Bywater ๐Ÿšซ

@Vincent Berg

Which punctuation, or formatting, do you employ for someone rolling their eyes?

While I never said it covers every emotion, I'd challenge rolling your eyes as being an attitude and not an emotion.

madnige ๐Ÿšซ

@Vincent Berg

Which punctuation, or formatting, do you employ for someone rolling their eyes?

(โ—”_โ—”)

Replies:   Keet
Keet ๐Ÿšซ

@madnige

There's an emoji for that ;)
๐Ÿ™„

Vincent Berg ๐Ÿšซ

@Pixy

I would argue that it's actually the complete opposite. As both reader and dabbling writer, I tend to ignore all punctuation other than full stops and comma's. Apostrophes can go fuck themselves.

Technically, there are establish (relative) time differences concerning pacing when using various punctuation marks (ex: semicolons take longer than commas, with em-dashes and full stops taking even longer).

awnlee jawking ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

It could also be because you discriminate against colons. I don't remember seeing many in your stories.

AJ

Pixy ๐Ÿšซ

@awnlee jawking

Whilst I don't (knowingly) discriminate against colons, I certainly and shamefully admit to severely physically abusing mine, repeatedly with both solid and liquid abuse of the worst kind. Especially at this time of year when we should be showing love to all....

Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@awnlee jawking

Everybody needs a colon. Having only a semi-colon requires significant medical intervention.

richardshagrin ๐Ÿšซ

@Dominions Son

Everybody needs a colon.

And their colons are full of shit.

Replies:   Dominions Son  joyR
Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@richardshagrin

And their colons are full of shit.

Not if they've had an enema.

joyR ๐Ÿšซ

@richardshagrin

And their colons are full of shit.

Caused by a full stop? Extreme constipation can result in a comma...

Vincent Berg ๐Ÿšซ

@Dominions Son

Everybody needs a colon. Having only a semi-colon requires significant medical intervention.

Usually, a semi-colon is the result of a partial (semi-)colon, not the other way around!

Replies:   Dominions Son
Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@Vincent Berg

Usually, a semi-colon is the result of a partial (semi-)colon, not the other way around!

this is true, but losing part of your colon, for whatever reason is life threatening and requires medical intervention, probably on going medical intervention for the rest of your life.

Quasirandom ๐Ÿšซ

@awnlee jawking

I tend to reserve colons for more format contexts: technical writing, business communications, and the like. I usually avoid it in fiction, unless a character or narrator is using a more formal register.

Journalism like that, I could go either way. But I've neither written nor edited journalism.

Crumbly Writer ๐Ÿšซ

@Quasirandom

I tend to reserve colons for more format contexts: technical writing, business communications, and the like. I usually avoid it in fiction, unless a character or narrator is using a more formal register.

Actually, the most common use of colons is for lists, while semi-colons are for listing related items: "The bag contained various produce: peanuts, pecans; and avocados are larger pulpy nuts."

awnlee jawking ๐Ÿšซ

@Quasirandom

If you always use the 'high impact' em-dash rather than the colon, it could come across as shouty. I have the opposite fault - I almost always use colons.

Dead-tree newspapers might prefer colons because they take less space.

I suppose I have a weak claim to some amateur journalism, but purely on an amateur basis. I never got paid for any of the articles I wrote.

AJ

Replies:   Vincent Berg
Vincent Berg ๐Ÿšซ

@awnlee jawking

If you always use the 'high impact' em-dash rather than the colon, it could come across as shouty. I have the opposite fault - I almost always use colons.

For me, after listing several different options and the reasons why they may not be viable, I'll then use the em-dash to set off a final foreshadowing elements. Since it's a separate theme, readers tend to dismiss it, while the extra 'shouty' punctuation ensures that readers will remember it, even though they've already discounted it.

Again, the reason for that is so that readers will understand when the secret is revealed, even though readers generally don't anticipate it. As such, it makes for a very handy tool.

Ernest Bywater ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

An em-dash is what you caught on video when Miss Watson of Harry Potter fame is filmed running between the shop and the car on a rainy day.

Replies:   Dominions Son
Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@Ernest Bywater

In honor of Christmas:

Em-Dashing through the snow
On a one horse open sleigh...

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