Running across the room, he opened the window.
Running across the room, he opened the window.
How could he open the window while running across the room?
Running is present tense but opened is past tense. Did he run so fast he moved backwards in time?
Nothing wrong with it. That's the way people talk.
You could write: "After running across the room, he opened the window." That would be correct, and pedantic readers would be less un-pleased.
Since they are impossible to please, why bother?
Write for people who have the ability - nay, the intelligence - to enjoy a story without having to validate the correctness of every sentence using the Chicago Manual of Style.
You could write: "After running across the room, he opened the window." That would be correct, and pedantic readers would be less un-pleased.
If considering opposition to this form of English pedantic, well, consider me a pedant. Gladly. Sister Mary Discipline back at my high school would have broken out the metal (not wooden) ruler if anyone ever wrote something like that in her English Comp class.
With all due respect, irv.
No matter how pedantic, I'm sure everyone understands what the author intended therefore the sentence achieves its objective. Yet it's possible to construct a perfectly grammatical sentence that would take a genius to unravel.
Sometimes it feels like the tail is wagging the dog.
AJ
Sometimes it feels like the tail is wagging the dog.
Only the dog would feel that.
:)
@awnlee jawking
Sometimes it feels like the tail is wagging the dog.
Only the dog would feel that.
I don't know about that. It's painful enough when my dog whacks me in the leg with his wagging tail. If the tail was wagging the dog...
my dog whacks me in the leg with his wagging tail
Or at least you hope that's the appendage he's using ... ;-)
AJ
You could write: "After running across the room, he opened the window." That would be correct, and pedantic readers would be less un-pleased.
Personally, I'd use the following:
Rushing across the room, he paused to open the window.
Unless you live in a gymnasium, and your living room contains a circular running track, I can't possibly envision anyone actually 'running' across a room. Thus, 'hurry' and/or 'rushing' seem more appropriate. But you need to transfer from the one act to the next (by the way, there's nothing at all unusual about have present and past tenses in the same sentences, as long as they're properly separated from each other. However, in this case, the present-tense 'running' directly contradicts the past-tense 'opened'.
@Mat_Tasswell
Reading a novel by Louise Penny, the introductory participial phrase made me cringe.
Actually, I do that quite frequently myself. I learned, some time ago why tying to fit lengthy descriptions into SOL's tight restrictions, that I can shave a significant amount of space by shifting certain sentence fragments to present tense. So now, whenever I need to shave some space on overly long sentences/paragraphs, I routinely alternate tenses. But the problem in this example isn't the present/past, it's the missing transitional phrasing.
(by the way, there's nothing at all unusual about have present and past tenses in the same sentences, as long as they're properly separated from each other
Aside from separation, I would think sequencing is an issue. Having past tense actions follow present tense actions in a single sentence would seem odd and/or confusing.
Running across the room, he opened the window.
That's wrong.
He can't be running across the room and opening the window at the same time.
He can't be running across the room and opening the window at the same time.
Maybe the window opening mechanism is triggered by pressure plates? Or the room is 'balanced', so his running changes the balance thereby causing the window to open.
:)
Without context it's impossible to know for certain, so on face value it's just an example of bad writing. Or as you put it. Wrong.
put the word 'After' at the start of the sentence or it implies he opened the window while he was running.
That grammatical structure is only used for simultaneous actions in English, and those are not simultaneous. Ernest has one easy fix; another is "He ran across the room, then opened the window."
That's always been my understanding. But more and more often I find this sort of thing in published novels. Lately I've been reading a lot of the novels by Louise Penny, who uses this questionable construction quite frequently.
Maybe it's not quite as egregious as the introductory participial phrase that doesn't modify the subject of the sentence.
Reading a novel by Louise Penny, the introductory participial phrase made me cringe.
Lately I've been reading a lot of the novels by Louise Penny, who uses this questionable construction quite frequently.
A modern "Penny Dreadful" ?
:)
Running across the room, he opened the window.
Of course the simplest rewrite is:
He ran across the room and opened the window.
He ran across the room
Just idle musing, but doesn't that imply the room is large? How soon after a standing start can someone be said to be running?
AJ
He ran across the room
Just idle musing, but doesn't that imply the room is large?
The incorrect sentence had "running" so I changed it to "ran."
My musing applies whether it's 'ran' or 'running'.
Sprinters use blocks because it takes more time to get into a run from a standing start.
AJ
Considering the surveys that state half of America is functionally illiterate, and most of the rest read at a 6th Grade level ... does it really matter?
Meanwhile we'll hope he opened the window before jumping through it.
Meanwhile we'll hope he opened the window before jumping through it.
Indeed, otherwise he could be in a lot of panes...
:)
Considering the surveys that state half of America is functionally illiterate, and most of the rest read at a 6th Grade level ... does it really matter?
Absolutely. Why add to the illiteracy?
The most common tip for new authors is to read, read, read. That doesn't help when what they're reading is filled with grammar errors.
Instead of educating people, we have grown accustomed to saying: Everyone's doing it that way so let's make it acceptable.
Those are some scary statistics but not terribly surprising. When I was at Boot Camp they tested our reading level. What scared the crap out of me was the guy that was in the nuclear power program tested at a 3rd grade level. I am pretty sure the manuals are written at a much higher level. I never learned if he ever completed his training.
You just confirmed what I always believed: Homer Simpson working at a nuclear power plant was NOT a fiction TV series, but a documentary.
You just confirmed what I always believed: Homer Simpson working at a nuclear power plant was NOT a fiction TV series, but a documentary.
It doesn't get really scary until you realize they were trying to put a positive spin on it. :)
I am pretty sure the manuals are written at a much higher level. I never learned if he ever completed his training.
I'm reasonably certain the program Rickover put together would washout such a person.
running across the room and reaching the window, he opens it, and falls out, aaaaahhh, thump.
What do you think of this sentence?
Its better than a long time in jail.
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