Forum: Editors/Reviewers Hangout

I want to see if the writing for my story has improved or not, and whether or not the story is working, so far. From the prologue to Chapter 7, I was doing a lot head-hopping, because I am not writer and I am not that experienced in writing. I just started writing for fun and to write stories I'd like to see. So there's a lot of mistakes those 7 chapters plus the prologue.

So, if anyone would be feeling to give me feedback. It'll be great.

sure, I'll have a gander at it in the next day or two. get back to you after. premise seems ok to my tastes.

do you want the feedback here or inline with the story?

It would be significantly easier if you Post a LINK to the story you ware asking to be reviewed; in this thread.