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qwe1 ๐Ÿšซ

A story about a boy who finds a mind controlling ring while scuba diving with the father

Replies:   SpookMeister  upper
SpookMeister ๐Ÿšซ

@qwe1

Did he say "My Precious" a lot?

Replies:   itsmehonest
itsmehonest ๐Ÿšซ

@SpookMeister

No but he gets his parents back together, if its the same story. Sorry CRS on the title

Replies:   Dinsdale
Dinsdale ๐Ÿšซ

@itsmehonest

Whoosh,

My Precious

is a reference to Lord of the Rings.

Replies:   sunseeker
sunseeker ๐Ÿšซ

@Dinsdale

Also Grim's M-249 in RLFJ's The Grim Reaper :D

upper ๐Ÿšซ

@qwe1

Ring of Command by Kenn Ghannon.

http://storiesonline.net/s/72472

Unfortunately, it's been removed.

Replies:   Zellus
Zellus ๐Ÿšซ

@upper

https://storiesonline.net/blogentry/57978

Replies:   upper
upper ๐Ÿšซ

@Zellus

Too bad. IIRC, characters under 14 were not important to the plot. It could probably be adjusted pretty easily.

It also had a different issue -- there were no big problems to resolve, so no plot. This is a very common issue for superpower stories. Either they build up to a huge showdown against super baddies, or they slip into being soap operas that can last for generations.

Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@upper

Either they build up to a huge showdown against super baddies, or they slip into being soap operas that can last for generations.

Which pretty well describes super hero comic books. Doesn't keep them from being popular.

Replies:   upper
upper ๐Ÿšซ

@Dominions Son

True. But they have distinct episodes, and each episode has a plot and an ending.

I don't have a problem with serials or universes that are presented as such. My problem is with serials that claim to be a single story, but never conclude.

Switch Blayde ๐Ÿšซ

@upper

so no plot. This is a very common issue for superpower stories. Either they build up to a huge showdown against super baddies

That is plot. Plot = conflict and you're describing the conflict of man vs man. The super hero vs the super bad guy.

Replies:   upper
upper ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

Yes, it's a plot. And Ring of Command didn't have it. Or much other conflict.

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