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Through My Eyes. Again. by Iskander

Quasirandom 🚫

Another story I want to spotlight: Through My Eyes. Again. by Iskander. Which is, yes, yet another do-over story—and yeah, I binged on do-over stories, not just on SOL, but also Chinese webnovels and American ebooks. This is one of the better I've read. I won't say it's my favorite, as that's the unfinished Rewind, but this one is lean and tight and harrowing and it nails the ending. Nails it.

It's fascinating how the do-over premise, in the hands of different authors, can be used with different focuses: rectifying wrongs either done to or by the protagonist, dealing with traumas of the previous life or of the dislocation itself, the logic problems of time-travel itself, building a more fulfilling life, pure wish-fulfillment, and so on. This one, more than most, is concerned with the play of history and incremental changes, and does it while remaining a tightly personal story.

The author has written a few side-stories, mainly set prior to this, and is working on a sequel. The former are tasty, and I look forward to the latter with a mix of anticipation and dread, hoping it meets the expectations set by this. (No pressure, Iskander!) In the meantime, there's this to read (or reread, as the case may be).

(And can I just say I love punctuation play in story titles? It's almost as much fun as doing it in band names, and yes, Godspeed You! Black Emperor, I'm looking at you.)

Ryan Sylander 🚫

@Quasirandom

I second the recommendation, great story with lots of subtle nuance to the narrative!

Cheers
RS

BlacKnight 🚫

@Quasirandom

(And can I just say I love punctuation play in story titles? It's almost as much fun as doing it in band names, and yes, Godspeed You! Black Emperor, I'm looking at you.)

So I assume you're a fan of "'—All You Zombies—'"?

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Quasirandom 🚫

@BlacKnight

The title, anyway. Been long enough since I read it, I don't remember what it's about.

samsonjas 🚫

@Quasirandom

So I really really liked the prose and found the story page-turning, but the plot was ... well, there wasn't one!

Spoiler alert.

It starts out as time-travel, but that's not actually really relevant. Imagine the story without that 'twist', and it'd just be the same story minus the opening para. And one less thing for the reader to be tracking and waiting for it to be relevant.

It starts out with Col being a girl pretending to be a boy, and again, that really isn't necessary. Exactly same story but with Col being a girl and the whole story would have the same impact. Its just another irrelevant detail.

It contains a dad that kinda hints at could be intelligence, but isn't. It contains a bit of holocaust survivor showing tattoo. It contains a metric ton of irrelevant stuff that, if it wasn't in the story, would be a cleaner even more gripping narrative.

If the story was just a beautifully written little first love story with none of the cold war hints-that-don't-add-much, I think it'd be an even better story!

Its like the story ended up not being what the author kinda loosely had in mind when they started writing. I'm not really eager to see follow-ups where the author tries to bring back all those loose ends and dead ends and make them somehow part of a bigger plot. Its not worth it!

But the strength of the prose, particularly the angst and suicide bit at the beginning, is really really strong.

So strong technically, but marred by plot details that get in the way of the real story.

So am following author because they are one of the absolute best new authors prose-wise page-turning-wise. I'm just waiting for fresh cleaner stories written with simple clean followable plots! :D

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