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Citizen Miller

mike99 ๐Ÿšซ

Just started reading this ... is it me, or is there a major disconnect between chapters 4 & 5 ?

It just seems very jarring ...

awnlee jawking ๐Ÿšซ

@mike99

Fantasy Lover's recent blog post.

Citizen Miller errors
Posted at 03/10/2024, 13:31:54


Yes, I know the story has lots of errors. Unfortunately, something happened when I zipped the chapters to post them. Now I have to go through each chapter and check each line. It will take a while.

FantasyLover

There are a couple of repeated chapters so presumably more missing bits too.

AJ

Replies:   mike99  madnige
mike99 ๐Ÿšซ

@awnlee jawking

I'll give up then :(

madnige ๐Ÿšซ

@awnlee jawking

There are a couple of repeated chapters

--and I thought I'd managed to hit 'Top' instead of 'Next' a couple of times.

happytechguy15 ๐Ÿšซ

@mike99

I read it a few days ago, if I ignore the repeated sections, then the story still works.

Replies:   awnlee jawking
awnlee jawking ๐Ÿšซ

@happytechguy15

I found the missing bits rather jarring. One of his harem went on a 'safe' supervisory mission in a bumblebee. The next time she's mentioned, she's seriously wounded. If you continue reading, several chapters later you find out she took a bullet for someone on a completely different mission.

I've given up, and I'm waiting for the re-upload.

AJ

jimq2 ๐Ÿšซ

@mike99

I gave up about halfway through it.

FantasyLover ๐Ÿšซ

@mike99

Just finished posting the corrections (I hope). What a mess!

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