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The Little Green Man from Mars

PotomacBob 🚫

When I read a story, I read it for pleasure, for the enjoyment I get because the author is a good storyteller, because the author makes me care what happens to the character, or for the ability of the author to put together words in a way that makes characters sound like individuals, and even, sometimes, with how much research it appears the author has done in furnishing details so self-explanatory so that even I can understand. I want the author to treat me as the Little Green Man from Mars; tell me so and assume I don't already know.
I do NOT read a story so that the authors can impress me with how many times they can send me to a dictionary; with their exhaustive knowledge of the names of guns and the model numbers and ammunition numbers - unless they also tell me what is special about that gun (i.e., it will kill an elephant a mile away) and maybe its cost (you have the choice of buying the gun or sending your kid to college). I enjoy reading about guns - as long as their use is explained in terms simple enough that I can understand it without having to search the Internet or call the IRA (the one in the U.S. - not Ireland).
What prompted this note was two stories. One was talking about the LOA of a boat (never explained), and the other was talking about an S&W Model 36.38 (never explained). I suppose the authors assumed that I already knew what both meant - and that if I didn't I was unworthy of reading their stories. I agreed and stopped reading.

Remus2 🚫

@PotomacBob

Length Overall - LOA affects boat handling.

S&W Model 36.38 - some minor historical significance, such as used by NYC police once upon a time.

I can see each being a minor detail in setting up a scene. Boat enthusiasts would want one detail, and firearm enthusiasts the other.

Computers, horses, airplanes, all have stories with details like that in them. I have a dim recollection of a story with the history of pet rocks in it. It's just minor pandering to a specific audience. As long as I understand the overall context, I don't worry about it. It's not really something to get your dander up about.

Dominions Son 🚫

@Remus2

some minor historical significance, such as used by NYC police once upon a time.

Not just NYPD. The S&W Model 36.38 was for many years (post 1950s through 1970s) the standard issue weapon for detectives and other "plain clothes" LEOs across the US. The short barrel making it easier to conceal.

It was introduced at the International Association of Chiefs of Police (IACP) convention in 1950 and became known as the Chiefs Special.

At the time, uniformed patrol officers would likely have been carrying the longer barreled S&W Model 10.

PotomacBob 🚫

@Remus2

Length Overall - LOA affects boat handling.

S&W Model 36.38 - some minor historical significance, such as used by NYC police once upon a time.

I can see each being a minor detail in setting up a scene. Boat enthusiasts would want one detail, and firearm enthusiasts the other.

Computers, horses, airplanes, all have stories with details like that in them. I have a dim recollection of a story with the history of pet rocks in it. It's just minor pandering to a specific audience. As long as I understand the overall context, I don't worry about it. It's not really something to get your dander up about.

If I understand your response, you believe one shouldn't get their dander up when the author provided details for enthusiasts. If that was your intent, then I agree with you. My point was a different one. I don't object to the details - I object to the lack of enough information for a non-enthusiast to understand.

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Keet 🚫

@PotomacBob

I object to the lack of enough information for a non-enthusiast to understand.

That is the essence of the thread you started: there should be enough information for a non-enthousiast to understand. Authors that write for a wider audience should add those little bits of extra information for those among us that are not omniscient :)

Replies:   Mushroom
Mushroom 🚫

@Keet

That is the essence of the thread you started: there should be enough information for a non-enthousiast to understand. Authors that write for a wider audience should add those little bits of extra information for those among us that are not omniscient :)

And that is pretty much how I write.

In the story I am writing now, I have been throwing in a lot of things related to games and the military that many may not know. So throughout the story I have explained what they were in the text, so those not into such things will know what I am talking about.

Otherwise, saying things like "saving roll" or "96" might leave people confused. And slowky I added more and more like that as I went, so I am free to those and other things without worry.

However, especially in the gaming aspect, it is more of a *D&D Light" I have done with it. Mostly I tell 2 aspects of the game. First is the process of creation, where like an author, musician or actor I have the character working at his "craft", but instead of spending hours on a guitar he spends hours going through books and thinking up and writing ideas. Then in the game, mostly it is framed as a "story in a story", where he and others play the game, as a narration of their actions.

In this way, having knowledge of how the game is played is not needed, just read it as an additional story.

Authors should walk a fine line when doing such. They want the story to be enjoyable to as many as possible, without coming off so "fanboyish" that only others into it will really get it. Me, I simply introduce a small concept here and explain it, another small concept there. Because things like game mechanics or the minutia of military life is really not a big importance to the story. It is just there to add flavoring, and provide other things for them to do other than just screw all the time.

Ernest Bywater 🚫

@PotomacBob

S&W Model 36.38

I would read that as a Smith & Wesson Model 36 in .38 calibre, but I can see how it wouldn't mean a thing to anyone not familiar with guns.

Without Remus2's comment on LOA I'd have taken it to be something related to the sails or rigging. Although I do know there is a difference between the length of a ship at the deck as against the length at the waterline and they affect different aspects of the handling, but never heard what the terms were. Again, a failure to tell the reader the meaning of the detail and if it's relevant or not.

Keet 🚫
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It's not necessary to explain everything in detail but what is necessary is to mention the specific characteristics important to the story or to understand what is meant. A simple "LOA" means nothing to most people so would need at least an explanation why it's important. Mentioning a specific gun or a caliber also means nothing to most people but "kills an elephant from a mile away" makes a specific characteristic known that is important to the story.
So I agree with PotomacBob that it's essential to include (some) information not likely to be known by the reader so he can read on without consulting external sources.
This problem is bigger than most authors think. I have extended my local library with a steadily growing set of appendices so I can quickly refer to something related to ships/naval, guns, or whatever. So far I have 16(!) different categories, some quite extensive.

Why mention a specific (classic) car but not add "sleek sporty" or "huge, heavy, and comfortable"? With that I don't have to look up what the hell makes that car so special in the context of the story.

For example "This gun xyz with caliber abc should do the trick" tells me very little but "This gun xyz with it's long range accuracy should do the trick" probably tells me enough to explain why that specific gun is chosen. Actually "long range accuracy" is enough, naming the brand of the gun means very little to me although I can understand that authors often want to keep realism as close as possible, just add a few words so I can understand why that specific gun is so important.

Don't expect every reader to have the same detailed knowledge to follow the story without having to look up specifics. Some readers will just read on without understanding the significance of a name or detail mentioned. Others like me (and PotomacBob) have that urge to know the 'why'. Too much missing clues and we enjoy a story less than it could be.

Replies:   Remus2
Remus2 🚫

@Keet

I disagree with him to an extent.

As long as I understand the overall context, I don't worry about it.

As per my earlier comment, context is more important. If the terms are sufficiently vague as to lose context, then I agree. If the terms are vague, but contextual continuity is maintained, then I disagree.

Replies:   Keet  richardshagrin
Keet 🚫
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@Remus2

If the terms are vague, but contextual continuity is maintained, then I disagree.

Why? These are stories, not scientific papers so if the reader understands what is going on it should be ok. "A gun" is vague but if there's an explanation what the gun can do that is needed for the story that should be sufficient. For the story's purpose it's not necessary to know exactly what brand, caliber etc. (Unless of course that's essential to the story and accurate for those who do know more about it.)

ETA re-reading this I think we do agree, if contextual continuity is maintained no extra explanations are required.

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Remus2 🚫

@Keet

ETA re-reading this I think we do agree, if contextual continuity is maintained no extra explanations are required.

Exactly

richardshagrin 🚫

@Remus2

context

Pro and con are opposites. Pro being in favor of and con being against. Text that is in favor of something would be Protext. If against, Context.

"In linguistics, the term text refers to:

The original words of something written, printed, or spoken, in contrast to a summary or paraphrase.
A coherent stretch of language that may be regarded as an object of critical analysis.

Text linguistics refers to a form of discourse analysis—a method of studying written or spoken language—that is concerned with the description and analysis of extended texts (those beyond the level of the single sentence). A text can be any example of written or spoken language, from something as complex as a book or legal document to something as simple as the body of an email or the words on the back of a cereal box.

In the humanities, different fields of study concern themselves with different forms of texts. Literary theorists, for example, focus primarily on literary texts—novels, essays, stories, and poems. Legal scholars focus on legal texts such as laws, contracts, decrees, and regulations. Cultural theorists work with a wide variety of texts, including those that may not typically be the subject of studies, such as advertisements, signage, instruction manuals, and other ephemera.

Text Definition
Traditionally, a text is understood to be a piece of written or spoken material in its primary form (as opposed to a paraphrase or summary). A text is any stretch of language that can be understood in context. It may be as simple as 1-2 words (such as a stop sign) or as complex as a novel. Any sequence of sentences that belong together can be considered a text.

Text refers to content rather than form; for example, if you were talking about the text of "Don Quixote," you would be referring to the words in the book, not the physical book itself. Information related to a text, and often printed alongside it—such as an author's name, the publisher, the date of publication, etc.—is known as paratext.

The idea of what constitutes a text has evolved over time. In recent years, the dynamics of technology—especially social media—have expanded the notion of the text to include symbols such as emoticons and emojis. A sociologist studying teenage communication, for example, might refer to texts that combine traditional language and graphic symbols.

Texts and New Technologies
The concept of the text is not a stable one. It is always changing as the technologies for publishing and disseminating texts evolve. In the past, texts were usually presented as printed matter in bound volumes such as pamphlets or books. Today, however, people are more likely to encounter texts in digital space, where the materials are becoming "more fluid," according to linguists David Barton and Carmen Lee:

" Texts can no longer be thought of as relatively fixed and stable. They are more fluid with the changing affordances of new media. In addition, they are becoming increasingly multimodal and interactive. Links between texts are complex online, and intertextuality is common in online texts as people draw upon and play with other texts available on the web."
An example of such intertextuality can be found in any popular news story. An article in The New York Times, for example, may contain embedded tweets from Twitter, links to outside articles, or links to primary sources such as press releases or other documents. With a text such as this, it is sometimes difficult to describe what exactly is part of the text and what is not. An embedded tweet, for instance, may be essential to understanding the text around it—and therefore part of the text itself—but it is also its own independent text. On social media sites such as Facebook and Twitter, as well as blogs and Wikipedia, it is common to find such relationships between texts.

Text Linguistics
Text linguistics is a field of study where texts are treated as communication systems. The analysis deals with stretches of language beyond the single sentence and focuses particularly on context, i.e. information that goes along with what is said and written. Context includes such things as the social relationship between two speakers or correspondents, the place where communication occurs, and non-verbal information such as body language. Linguists use this contextual information to describe the "socio-cultural environment" in which a text exists.

Sources
Barton, David, and Carmen Lee. "Language Online: Investigating Digital Texts and Practices." Routledge, 2013.
Carter, Ronald, and Michael McCarthy. "Cambridge Grammar of English." Cambridge University Press, 2006.
Ching, Marvin K. L., et al. "Linguistic Perspectives on Literature." Routledge, 2015."

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BarBar 🚫

@richardshagrin

context Pro and con are opposites. ... blah, blah, blah ... a text is .. blah, blah, blah.

All of which goes to prove that the word "context" can't be understood by analysing its parts.

context (noun) the circumstances that form the setting for an event, statement, or idea, and in terms of which it can be fully understood.

(source: google)

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BarBar 🚫

@BarBar

All of which goes to prove that the word "context" can't be understood by analysing its parts.

Okay, I lied. You can, but you have to use the correct definitions.

The prefix con-, which means "with" or "thoroughly,"

(source: google)

So context literally means "with the text"

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samuelmichaels 🚫
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@BarBar

Okay, I lied. You can, but you have to use the correct definitions.

The prefix con-, which means "with" or "thoroughly,"

(source: google)

So context literally means "with the text"

This was little more than a pretext for gratuitous use of etymology.

Replies:   Dominions Son
Dominions Son 🚫

@samuelmichaels

This was little more than a pretext for gratuitous use of etymology.

This is a post text to ask: Why are you arguing with the smiling penis?

Replies:   Wheezer
Wheezer 🚫

@Dominions Son

This is a post text to ask: Why are you arguing with the smiling penis?

'Grinning Dick' is a bit more descriptive for our annoying Fool. I wonder if he wears Motley full time as he plays the Fool full time.

Replies:   awnlee jawking
awnlee jawking 🚫

@Wheezer

he plays the Fool full time

Not quite.

He's saner when reviewing.

AJ

Replies:   Wheezer
Wheezer 🚫

@awnlee jawking

He's saner when reviewing.

Then he should spend more of his time reviewing... a lot more.

Uther_Pendragon 🚫

@BarBar

context Pro and con are opposites. ... blah, blah, blah ... a text is .. blah, blah, blah.

Old joke. "If con is the opposite of pro, what is the opposite of Progress?"

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richardshagrin 🚫

@Uther_Pendragon

the opposite of Progress

Congress.

It isn't as funny as it used to be.

Replies:   Dominions Son
Dominions Son 🚫

@richardshagrin

It isn't as funny as it used to be.

It was never funny. It's too true to be funny.

joyR 🚫

@Uther_Pendragon

Old joke. "If con is the opposite of pro, what is the opposite of Progress?"

If a crime fighter fights crime
And a firefighter fights fires
Then what does a freedom fighter fight..??

awnlee jawking 🚫

@joyR

Then what does a freedom fighter fight..??

ISIS consider themselves freedom fighters, as does China's People's Liberation Army.

AJ

Replies:   joyR
joyR 🚫

@awnlee jawking

ISIS consider themselves freedom fighters, as does China's People's Liberation Army.

Yup, freedom fighters fight freedom.

Replies:   awnlee jawking
awnlee jawking 🚫

@joyR

China's People Liberation Army is currently liberating the residents of Hong Kong from having the right to protest, and liberating the Uighurs from having the right to have children. Ain't freedom great!

AJ

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richardshagrin 🚫

@awnlee jawking

freedom

The dom (Dominant person) is free to do what ever they want.
A free Dom.

Ernest Bywater 🚫

@joyR

Then what does a freedom fighter fight..??

they fight against individual freedoms so that a socialist or religious dictatorship can be established.

Replies:   BarBar
BarBar 🚫

@Ernest Bywater

Then what does a freedom fighter fight..??

they fight against individual freedoms so that a socialist or religious dictatorship can be established.

Oh my goodness! To me, that sounds like a fairly one-sided view.

Sometimes this might be true. But also sometimes they are fighting against a dictatorship ... be it socialist or religious or fascist or whatever.

Sometimes they are fighting against one dictatorship so that they can set up their own dictatorship and the concept of individual freedoms never enters into the equation on either side of the fence.

It's all a matter of perspective. Looking down the list in wikipedia, it's pretty clear that some fairly horrible people described themselves as freedom fighters. I have no desire to defend those people.

But maybe sometimes people, just maybe, fight for genuine freedom from a corrupt system with some sort of high ideal of creating a better world. Sadly humanity being such as it is, often when if they win they fail to put in place the thing they were fighting for and end up replacing one failed system with another.

irvmull 🚫
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"When Holmes in one of his queer humors would sit in an arm-chair with his hair trigger and a hundred Boxer cartridges, and proceed to adorn the opposite wall with a patriotic V.R [the royal monogram for Queen Victoria] done in bullet pocks, I felt that neither the atmosphere nor the appearance of the room was improved by it" - The Musgrave Ritual

Nowhere in that are told that Holmes is using a gun, nor are details of make, model, or useful qualities described. Yet, people still read this, and enjoy it. Nothing more is needed.

Would it have been improved if details were added, such as it being "an Adams Mk III, a nice gun, but the .450 ammo was weak, and it did not perform well in the Afghan wars, as Watson well knew from his time as an army surgeon..."?

Perhaps without the reference to "bullet pocks", some might think that Holmes and his "hair trigger" might be "adorning the wall" with something else. Especially if Conan Doyle had written for SOL.

Replies:   Uther_Pendragon
Uther_Pendragon 🚫

@irvmull

Updated: 6/26/2020, 1:41:11 PM
"When Holmes in one of his queer humors would sit in an arm-chair with his hair trigger and a hundred Boxer cartridges,

Well, Doyle (or Watson) provides details. The pistol had a hair trigger and he used Boxer cartridges. The point is that the details add a sense of the narration being realistic without the particulars of the details being crucial (Does anyone know what a Boxer cartridge is?)

This goes with another frequent failing in online erotica. The girl is 5' 6 1/2" with robins-egg blue eyes, honey-blonde hair, a peaches&cream complexion and a 32 DD bra size. That's too much description. But you should put a little description in.

Replies:   Dominions Son
Dominions Son 🚫
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@Uther_Pendragon

Does anyone know what a Boxer cartridge is?

I always read "a hundred Boxer cartridges" as and odd London slang way of saying a box of 100 cartridges.

ETA: Google & Wikipedia inform me that I was wrong.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cartridge_(firearms)

The identifying feature of centerfire ammunition is the primer which is a metal cup containing a primary explosive inserted into a recess in the center of the base of the cartridge. The firearm firing pin crushes this explosive between the cup and an anvil to produce hot gas and a shower of incandescent particles to ignite the powder charge.[8] Berdan and Boxer cartridge primers are both considered "centerfire" and are not interchangeable at the primer level; however, the same weapon can fire either Berdan- or Boxer-primed cartridges if the overall dimensions are the same.[9]

Back in Sir Arthur Conan Doyle's day, center-fire cartridges would have been relatively new so the primer type would have been and important detail.

One other point, the Berdan primer setup was invented in the US and the Boxer primer setup was invented in the UK.

BarBar 🚫

I do think sometimes an author needs to include some level of detail to say something about the character. If the character is supposed to be a gun enthusiast, then you can't have him/her say, "I proudly scanned over my collection of guns. I picked up the gun I wanted to use but then I put it back and picked up another gun because that would be better for this situation. There was another gun I really wanted to use but I ran out of bullets for that gun so I had to use this gun."

Uther_Pendragon 🚫

@PotomacBob

How much do you explain, and how do you explain it?

The story I have practically finished now -- not the story I'm currently posting or the story that comes after that, but the story which now exists only in my home computer -- provides two, very different, examples

AMA - The most important private source for education for freedmen was the American Missionary Association. In the characters' thoughts and dialogue, however, it was the AMA. Today, if your not a historian or a mathematician, those initials can only mean the American Medical Association

Dinner - in the 1860s and 1870s, this was always eaten at noon. Supper was another meal, entirely, and lunch did not exist.

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AmigaClone 🚫

@Uther_Pendragon

AMA - The most important private source for education for freedmen was the American Missionary Association. In the characters' thoughts and dialogue, however, it was the AMA. Today, if your not a historian or a mathematician, those initials can only mean the American Medical Association

I have a story where depending on the context, the initials OSU can mean a 'State University' in either Oregon, Oklahoma, or Ohio. Most of the time when they are used the context provides a way to tell which the one being refeered to.

Ernest Bywater 🚫

@AmigaClone

I have a story where depending on the context, the initials OSU can mean a 'State University' in either Oregon, Oklahoma, or Ohio. Most of the time when they are used the context provides a way to tell which the one being refeered to.

When you intend to use an acronym the best, and recommended, method is to immediately link it with the full name the first time you use it. Thus, with the AMA version used earlier it should read something like - ... he got books to study from the American Missionary Association (AMA) ... - or - ... he got books to study from the AMA (American Missionary Association) ... That way everyone knows what you mean by it.

A similar type of explanation or reasoning should be with any other specialist or technical information you provide in a story. An example could be:

I chose to buy the Glock pistol because I wanted a gun I could use without having to remember to disengage the safety when I went to use while the built in safety of the Glock meant it didn't discharge by accident.

Replies:   Keet
Keet 🚫

@Ernest Bywater

I chose to buy the Glock pistol because I wanted a gun I could use without having to remember to disengage the safety when I went to use while the built in safety of the Glock meant it didn't discharge by accident.

An excellent way to tell a non-gun specialist what is so specific about the gun that it is chosen for the purpose! In a short, nicely readable way it explains a. that a Glock is a gun, b. that it has no safety, and c. that not having a safety is still safe to wear and use. And yes, there are readers that don't know that a Glock is a gun although SOL made sure most will know it by now :D

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Ernest Bywater 🚫

@Keet

a. that a Glock is a gun, b. that it has no safety, and c. that not having a safety is still safe to wear and use.

The main reason I would choose a Glock would be the fact it has a built in safety device that does not need to be manually disengaged prior to pointing and shooting. Back in the 1970s I watched over an hour of incident re-enactments involving police officers being shot in the course of their duties, most were killed. In over 80% of the cases the officers had their guns in their hands and the manual safety was still engaged. In most cases witnesses reported the officers had tried to shoot the criminal but the gun didn't go off, thus it looked like in the pressure of the situation they failed to disengage the manual safety prior to aiming the weapon. If they had the safety off it's likely they would have been a live and the killer dead.

Many people forget that the manual safety on guns were developed for revolvers so that if it dropped on the floor and something hit the hammer thumb latch the hammer wouldn't strike the cartridge and fire the bullet. It was this issue that had people leaving a blank chamber under the hammer and thus had only 5 rounds in a six shot revolver. Most of the early pistols had the exposed hammer thumb latch so they incorporated the same design for the same reason, and it's been a standard since then. However, in recent times a few guns, like the Glock brand, are manufactured without an external manual safety, but with an internal safety that does the same job. However, the internal safety disengages when you start to squeeze the trigger. This means you don't have to remember about disengaging the safety before using it.

NB I've also heard of people who got shot because they disengaged the manual safety when they drew their gun, then later worked the manual safety catch prior to attempting to use the gun. They did this because they had trained to disengage the safety immediately prior to taking aim, and in these cases they actually re-engaged the safety.

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StarFleet Carl 🚫

@Ernest Bywater

The main reason I would choose a Glock would be the fact it has a built in safety device that does not need to be manually disengaged prior to pointing and shooting.

The other reason for a Glock is that they just don't care. (I have a Glock 17 Gen 4 in 9 mm.) If you've ever watched the movie, U.S. Marshals, in one of the scenes, a pistol is dropped into a bin of grain, found, and then fired. You could take a Glock, drop it onto a beach, bury it in sand, then pick it up a month later, rinse it in the ocean, and fire it.

The only issue I have with a Glock is that it's bit of an pain to keep the third round on target, due to the recoil effects. I prefer my Sig-Sauer, because it acts more like a Model 1911 for recoil.

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Ernest Bywater 🚫

@StarFleet Carl

You could take a Glock, drop it onto a beach, bury it in sand, then pick it up a month later, rinse it in the ocean, and fire it.

Personally, if I had to get into a shooting event at hand gun range and could have any gun I choose, I'd want an Owen gun with an extended magazine as it worked as you pulled it out of the mud or water. However, it isn't an easily concealed weapon to carry.

My experience has been the effect of recoil has more to do with the type of round being fired and how you hold the gun than with the gun design as most are designed to minimise the recoil effect as possible. Very few guns are design to eliminate the recoil effect as to do so requires the barrel to be in line with the centre of your grip so the energy of the discharge goes straight back. The majority of guns are designed to put the barrel as close to your aiming system as possible, and that's usually just above the top of your grip so you can use your eye on the sights to aim.

Remus2 🚫
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@StarFleet Carl

The only issue I have with a Glock is that it's bit of an pain to keep the third round on target, due to the recoil effects. I prefer my Sig-Sauer, because it acts more like a Model 1911 for recoil.

The rake angle of a Glock is more aggressive than a Sig-Sauer or 1911. The human hand has a rake angle as well. Which pistol rake angle works best for an individual is ties to that persons palm rake angle.

If you rest your hand and forearm it will curl your fingers naturally. Holding your arm vertically in front of you while resting your forearm in this manner will reveal your personal rake angle.

With your minds eye, draw a vertical line centered on your forearm up through your wrist and past your middle finger. The offset from that line to the angle your middle finger takes at rest is your personal rake angle.

The pistol grip with the closest match to your personal rake angle will be the better fit and more accurate for point and shoot rapid defense. It will also allow faster more natural follow up shots.

What you described tells me the shallower rake angle of a 1911 and alike grips are more your natural angle than of a Glock for you. The energy of recoil is secondary to that.

richardshagrin 🚫

@AmigaClone

Ohio

I believe The Ohio State University almost always uses "The". It isn't "Ohio State University" it is The Ohio State University.

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awnlee jawking 🚫

@richardshagrin

I believe The Ohio State University almost always uses "The". It isn't "Ohio State University" it is The Ohio State University.

And if they used the archaic practice of writing 's' like 'f', that would give TOFU - what a terrific attraction for today's woke snowflake students.

AJ

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PotomacBob 🚫

@awnlee jawking

what a terrific attraction for today's woke snowflake students.

I wonder what adjectives those students would use to lump all of us together.

Replies:   awnlee jawking
awnlee jawking 🚫

@PotomacBob

I wonder what adjectives those students would use to lump all of us together.

Coronavirus fodder.

AJ

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richardshagrin 🚫

@awnlee jawking

Coronavirus fodder.

Is that why it was Fodders Day June 21st?

PotomacBob 🚫

@Uther_Pendragon

It's fairly easy in a story to write "the American Missionary Association (AMA)" on first reference, and just AMA after that.
"In many rural areas, even today, the largest meal of the day is dinner and is eaten mid-day. The evening meal was called supper, often either soup or leftovers from dinner."

Replies:   Uther_Pendragon
Uther_Pendragon 🚫

@PotomacBob

It's fairly easy in a story to write "the American Missionary Association (AMA)" on first reference, and just AMA after that.
"In many rural areas, even today, the largest meal of the day is dinner and is eaten mid-day. The evening meal was called supper, often either soup or leftovers from dinner."

Well, I do context "AMA" thus, the first time. (Which means that I have to use it in narrative rather than in dialogue the first time. I am, however, not 100% sure that all my readers will remember that first use 200 K later in the story.

"Dinner" is one o those words that are slowly evolving. That aa minority of readers won't have problems with the old meaning is cold comfort.

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Dominions Son 🚫

@Uther_Pendragon

I am, however, not 100% sure that all my readers will remember that first use 200 K later in the story.

So do it the first time it's used in each chapter.

samuelmichaels 🚫
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I like the idea of the author using specialized knowledge (be it firearms or blacksmithing) as a seasoning -- a bit to give it an unusual flavor, but not so much it detracts from the main plot (or gives you indigestion).

But there is a different approach that the late Dick Francis used, mostly with success. His novels often used a specialized field of knowledge as the main ingredient. He slowly introduced the reader to the new field, often horse racing, but in other books wines, or sailing, or piloting, and made the reader feel like they understood it by the end of the book.

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PotomacBob 🚫
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@samuelmichaels

But there is a different approach that the late Dick Francis used, mostly with success. His novels often used a specialized field of knowledge as the main ingredient.

To narrow it down a bit, could you please name ONE Dick Francis novel in which he did that? I'm a reader, not an author, and I'd like to not have to read all of them just so I can find one that uses that technique. Thanks.

samuelmichaels 🚫

To narrow it down a bit, could you please name ONE Dick Francis novel in which he did that? I'm a reader, not an author, and I'd like to not have to read all of them just so I can find one that uses that technique.

I know you said ONE, but I will list a few:
Dead Cert, and many others for horse racing (and horse betting);
Rat Race, flying (GA);
Shattered, glass-making.

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PotomacBob 🚫

@samuelmichaels

I know you said ONE, but I will list a few:
Dead Cert, and many others for horse racing (and horse betting);
Rat Race, flying (GA);
Shattered, glass-making.

Thank you very much for the list. I'll read all three.

karactr 🚫

How about, almost any of them. From inside racing, boating, photography, ad nauseam. I remember reading many of them in Reader's Digest condensed versions that my mother used to love.

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irvmull 🚫

@karactr

How about, almost any of them. From inside racing, boating, photography, ad nauseam.

Photography, eh?

I have a degree in photography, and one of my professors made the "photo finish" photos at a racetrack as his first job as a teenager.

So I've ordered the book "Reflex". We'll see....

Wheezer 🚫

Words and labels...

Depends on the POV of the observer to the events.

Islamic terrorists do not consider themselves terrorists.
Same for Irish IRA terrorists, etc.
Pre-Civil Rights Southern Democrats were anything but democratic and re-labeled themselves Republicans, but were the same people.
The USSR was neither a union nor socialist. (Union implies a willing joining)

BarBar 🚫

Also China's PLA no longer fit the definition of freedom fighters. They might still call themselves a Liberation Army but they have been the authority in that country since 1949. The definition of a freedom fighter is someone who fights against the established authority in their country so they can win what they consider to be their own "freedoms".

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