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How to write moaning in sex scenes without it sounding stupid?

Stuprator ๐Ÿšซ

Like when a guy is going "Oh... oh God... oh, God, I'm gonna come... ", etc. Any advice, such as recommending stories where it's done right?

Sarkasmus ๐Ÿšซ

@Stuprator

...maybe that's just me, but I don't see anything wrong with the example you gave.

Justin Case ๐Ÿšซ

@Stuprator

Depends on the volume, intensity, and conviction of the one doing the moaning in my opinion.

Example...

You can 'moan' out of pleasure from me wrapping you in a warm blanket on a cold day.
AND
You can 'moan' out in half-lucid pain as I re-apply the burning torch to the already cooked bottom of your foot.

Same word... 'moan'... just two totally different scenarios and usages.

Replies:   StarFleet Carl
StarFleet Carl ๐Ÿšซ

@Justin Case

I re-apply the burning torch to the already cooked bottom of your foot.

That's not going to do much of anything. If you've already cooked the bottom of someone's foot, then you've destroyed the nerve endings. That means they're not going to pass anything else on.

Replies:   Justin Case
Justin Case ๐Ÿšซ
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@StarFleet Carl

I like the way you think.
That's why we must move on to 'new real estate' for each procedure.

Just save the groin for last.

Bondi Beach ๐Ÿšซ
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@Stuprator

It's not a direct quote, but in "Outlander" Jamie comments to Claire about those "wee noises you make." She denies it, of course, but he insists. In other words, find a way to go about it indirectly.

~ JBB

Replies:   awnlee jawking
awnlee jawking ๐Ÿšซ

@Bondi Beach

Jamie comments to Claire about those "wee noises you make."

What hypocrisy! Jamie wees standing up so will make far more wee noises than Claire ;-)

AJ

Replies:   Bondi Beach
Bondi Beach ๐Ÿšซ

@awnlee jawking

What hypocrisy! Jamie wees standing up so will make far more wee noises than Claire ;-)

Not so sure about that. They spend a lot of time outdoors, after all.

The Internet (reliably, of course) informs me that "piss" is "pish" in Scottish.
~ JBB

tenyari ๐Ÿšซ

@Stuprator

Sometimes I will just... make it sound stupid.

Throw in comedy. Make one of the characters observe or comment on how absurd sex is. It's kind of funny and erotic at the same time, or to me always was. It's both very gross and very appealing at the same time.

So I can play between both ends of that - having a character break out in giggles, or have something funny happen. That gives me 'space' to write really corny things around the humor.

Replies:   awnlee jawking
awnlee jawking ๐Ÿšซ

@tenyari

have something funny happen

Pussy fart!

AJ

Replies:   Scribbler
Scribbler ๐Ÿšซ

@awnlee jawking

Pussy fart!

Always better to have friends, than enemas...

Though both can be fulfilling.

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