Thanks to all of you for the feedback—it’s really helped. I’ve gone back and updated Chapters 4 and 5. A lot of grammar, tense, and other mistakes are hopefully fixed (though I’m not claiming it’s perfect). Also I changed how Michael and the different women are portrayed. The updated chapter has been submitted and should be posted shortly
Some of you might still not like where I’ve taken things, and that’s fair—you’ll have to decide if the story’s worth following in this new direction.
Appreciate you sticking with me, and I’d love to hear what you think of the updates.
—CCTW