I've uploaded chapter 12. It should go live Wednesday morning.
Chapter 13 is still undergoing conversion but is should be up Saturday morning. I hope this posting schedule suits everyone's reading schedule.
My writing career has reached a new milestone: negative comments! The first comment pointed out that i'm "...A week writer." The second focused on my making Alexandria Ocasio-Cortez a former president of the United States.
One of my writing goals is to "show" and not "tell." It's quite possible I've taken this too far with using AOC as a prop. Early on, I decided handguns are very uncommon in the Loyalty Gene world. Why? Because it would be too easy for a bad guy to shoot one of my protagonists.
Instead of writing circles around handguns, I took the easy way out and made a progressive a former president. It makes sense, doesn't it? Those evil progressives would take away all the guns, right?
So, if a reader wonders why Gene didn't just shoot someone, its because AOC took away the guns!
My "crime" is excessive subtlety. Consider this a lesson learned.
I'm not sure if I should leave the political comment up. regardless of a reader's opinion, TLG doesn't have a political agenda. The comment is out of place.
Now, I want to discuss pacing.
Chapters 11, 12, and 13 are slow-ish. I needed to put all the characters in position before kicking off the fun and games. Please let me know if you think they are too slow.
If you absolutely must discuss politics, send me an email. Please include links to back up your points.
lichtyd