After getting the scores for Chelsea, I discovered an earlier version of it, one with dialog in it. I combined the two and I think it is a better story. It would be helpful to receive and comments you would like. I am trying to get my scores to be higher. For me this is a learning experience. Please be brutal with your comments, but be honest, and constructive.
I am now writing full time on several projects, in hopes of getting published instead of self published.