I finally have someone a bit better at finding errors in my stories than ... um ... my son. (He's been my first reader, and general editor for quite some time.)
The problem right now is, there will still be errors creep in, as well as creative differences between the editor and what I intend to write. I'm writing dialogue between people with distinctly different views on things - which means they're not all going to have perfect grammar.
Net result is that I've uploaded replacements for Chapters 4 - 12 tonight. Same story, so if you've already downloaded, don't worry about it. Thanks to Soronel, many of the errors that crept in have been corrected. (And some of them are still there, because I don't think they're errors.) I've also been getting help from CoulPert as well.
Next regular chapter will be uploaded Friday morning.