I noticed a lot of issues when I reread the story, the change of perspective wasn't consistent, I wasn't descriptive enough and told it like I was talking to someone rather than as a true story.
After reading some other authors, notably Aroslav and Bluedragon, I realized I needed.to work harder. Rather than let myself get complacent in the way I was headed, I decided to start fresh. I am leaving the current version up until I complete the rewrite to the point I am at, but I don't guarantee that the story will remain the same. I thank you for your patience with me.