I just posted chapter 20. I liked it, I really did. But a large part of me is saying this is crap - crap because I wanted to write a story that was realistic. One I could imagine living myself.
No one is REALLY like these characters - especially the females - in real life. And if there were really women out there like Amber and Emily, surely no one would ever agree to take them on unless they were a sadistic bastard who wanted a playthings, not a naive do-gooder like Aaron.
The story isn't supposed to go like it has. Mother and daughter are supposed to learn to be better and I hinted that they were actually doing some things right, despite Amber trying to drive things.
But IF the character Aaron becomes a sadistic bastard and plays with them until his playthings get used up - destroyed mentally and physically, then said sadistic bastard would just blindfold them, drive them to the desert and dump them, never knowing or caring if they survived.
I wanted a clean, fun story of light bondage and exciting dares. This has become something else. I don't know if I can change it now.
Please, please someone take it over and fix it. Make it fun. I'm just not a good writer. My dark side is too deep, I guess. I don't want to keep writing it but I'm kind of hooked.