A new version of The Tip was posted, after being edited by one of the more well known editors here. He is known by and editing for many very popular authors on SOL. He's amazing. I had no idea. Well, I guess I did, but still.
In any case, thank you, for your input and help. He only went through it once, and I don't want use his name without his permission, so I'll wait on that. This being a holiday (Happy Independence Day, y'all) I doubt that will happen today, but if he see's this he'll understand. I'll be out with family all day, so I'll catch up with him later.
I was wrong when I thought I could do this myself, and now that I have help, adult supervision, if you will, I hope to provide a more readable story each time. We'll see. An editor can only do so much. You can't build a castle out of sticks and twigs.
Again, Happy Independence Day to all. Stay safe, drive careful, don't lose any fingers to the notorious Black Cat, and watch for crazies.