So far I have gotten an even dozen responses to my previous posting. I don't have time to respond individually, so I thought I'd do it here.
To all who responded, thank you.
Most were positive, even encouraging.
One suggested that the people who needed to read and understand my "lesson," if I can call it that, won't.
My hope was that by making that posting I'd save some potentially good stories from the bit bucket. As the cliche goes, if just one author gets the point, it's worth it.
Another complained that I was suggesting short, clipped sentences all the time. I didn't think I was, but I agree that the length of sentences really depends on the flow of the text, the dialogue particularly. That's a whole 'nother subject, too complex to get into here.
Again, thanks for the responses. Keep them cards and letters coming in, folks. I hope to return to the lists of fiction and Naked in School in the near future. For now I'm dealing with a family loss. It's gonna take some time.