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The goat's comments were pretty intelligent. He asked the same question others have asked about "Hank's Romantic Life". Namely "Where is the romance?" "Where is the woman he is going to become attached to?" and lastly "Can he make it with Wendy, who is also a Mage in growth?"
The answer to this is simple. Hank has realized that a Lifelong Partner is not going to be in his portfolio. Lady Eisenham has told him that she's over 500 years old, and Lady Elizabeth Drummond has said that she has had 5 or so "Partners" in her 500 plus years of life. He knows that his sister, despite his efforts to prolong her life will probably only last a century or so. And the Earl of March (Sir David Drummond) is easily older than all of the non Wizard Mages in the American Council. All of his contemporaries in Magic are older than he is. All of the people he is socially with have a limited "Shelf Life".
He also has seen a life lesson in Pat. Who managed to kill an early girlfriend and cripple himself with a car as a result of his negligence.
Add to this the recognition that he get's Laid often enough and with enough variety that he doesn't need to worry about the High School Courting Dance that others have to practice.
And more surprises are to come. He needs the flexibility to unencumbered by "life long" romance.
After reading a few of the e-mails, one author I had a lot of
respect for pointed some thing out to me.
"This kid is 17 going on 50. Of course some of his words and thoughts were scrambled. Kids brains don't get good impulse control until they are 25 or so. And some make stupid mistakes. And a Few get caught in the middle of youth and adult too soon. "
So I have resubmitted this story after going through carefully and looking for mistakes. I think I got most of them.
But to the readers, I want to say if reading this story is like one reader described, then that's all right with me. He described it as being in a convertible, top down, bright sunny day, driving out in the country and hitting a mass of potholes. The jarring just made him uncomfortable. My advice? Drive carefully. Miss the potholes. Enjoy the story.
Did you ever have one of those situations where you THOUGHT you were uploading the right chapter and you weren't? This happens when you use Word, in conjunction with OneDrive, which does not update your most recent copy until you log out and then back in.
So, I uploaded the shortened chapter 6. And then when I went back and read it this morning, I found that it was cut off 1/2 way through. So I had to massage the 6.1 to reflect deletion of the material of 6.0 and save it as a 7. And I cursed my computer all the while.
I can only say that I have been away from writing too long which allowed me to make such a BONEHEAD mistake. Oh well. So today I do 2 inserts, and start on the Wednesday chapter.
Well, Its' interesting. So far, 20 of you have been very supportive of my extension of hte story of Hank that Reluctant_Sir started some years ago. Most of you (35 or so) have commented on my lack of accuracy in Capitalization, Punctuation, Use of tense, confusion of Atlanta and Augusta (I didn't) and one enterprising person even commented that it was the 75 Regiment rather then the 75th division. (Now that is a real detail digger)
And ONE of you followed the breadcrumbs I have left littering the Landscape. Breadcrumbs that were planted by RS in the 101, and which I have carried on into 201. Bread crumbs that will have an amazing impact on the future of Mages, Wizards, and Slaves. And have impact on the treaty between all species.
Can you guess what these crumbs point to?
Probably one of the greatest boosts to your ego as a writer is from the comments of your readers. And when your ego gets too big, along comes a pin to pop it. I absolutely love reader comments. Reader emails are usually complimentary. The ones that aren’t are usually well meaning assertions of their superiority as proofreaders, not writers. It goes with the writing. You should have seen the flack i got over classy conversions.
But to everyone, please tell me what you think. My skin is pretty thick, and feedback is precious, even bad feedback.
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