My first chapter of my first story got criticism because I did not have enough sex in it. It was a valid criticism because I was afraid to express my inner sexual fantasies in a story. But I had to admit it is after all, Fiction, so it doesn't mean I am a bad girl. At least, I hope not. So, chapter 2 has a scene where Rebecca loses her virginity to a ghostly apparition that seems very much like a heavily muscled Gladiator in one of the tile murals in the hidden basement chamber. She makes a new friend in the Assistant Director, Allison Chambers, an attractive well-dressed woman in her mid-thirties. She gets the vibe that Allison would like to do more than just have an "intelligent conversation" with her. Then, in the closing scene of Chapter 2, she breaks down and gives her buddy, Rudy, a helping hand in the shower just to reward him for his frustrated patience with her reluctance to spread her legs. Chapter 3 will further explore the relationship with the Assistant Director Allison and she has another midnight visit from the ghostly Gladiator.
I am so happy to see my first story in print. I had some criticism about two factors. I found it to be very perceptive criticism. The first was that I had muddled up the whole "Vestal Virgin" thing and used the wrong god, etc. and that the temple was in an entirely different place. My only excuse is that the whole scenario is just a fictional account of imagination and not historical fact. I was just having a bit of fun not doing research. But, admittedly, the criticism was well-founded. The second criticism was that I did not have enough sex in the story. I guess some peoples capacity for sex is greater than others. I know I was lacking in this area but my husband read the draft and I was being a bit guarded for fear of losing his much needed support. I hope to add more juicy parts soon and branch out into different Gothic Horror stories. I am not a "erotica" person but I do like a good tumble. My favorite genre in that area is anything to do with spanking. I have tried to encourage my hubby in that activity but he seems far too reticent to participate. I must admit it is a real "turn-on" for me and I will try to incorporate some narrative into future stories. Thank you to all readers who read my story. Talk to you later. AW