Thank you all for your comments.
I have had a number of people comment that even though the story was good, it would have been better if I had filled some of the gaps with missions and that chapter 2 seemed almost disconnected from chapter 3.
You know something I believe you may be right. Comments like that are appreciated. I do want to learn to improve my writing style. I will keep this story in my active/needs work folder and if I can come up with improvements, I will do them. If I can come up with a smoother whole I will repost the story.
Again I do appreciate comments if they are offered in a constructive manner.
Thank You
Holdred
