I'm reposting the 2nd chapter because it's sloppy.
I hate that.
I was trying to play cribbage with my Grandma while I edited a porn story. I lost every game, my story looks like crap, and I'm probably going to hell.
All in all, not a bad days work.
My original story is evolving, if I can get serious for a minute. I'm starting to like my characters, which is always bad. It might be more romantic and less ruthless than I previously planned. No, I take that back, it'll still be Ruthless, just because I hate that name, but I probably won't let Barb rape anyone. Now I want her to be nice, for gawshakes, as Grandma would say.
I apologize in advance if anyone's life depended on the NC code, it might have to be coercion instead. We'll see, so don't die yet. Okay? I love you!
I did an immediate repost. Wow. There was a paragraph in this story that was shockingly bad. I have no idea how it got missed, but it's fixed now (or very soon). Apologies.
I don't anticipate cheating or cuckolding in this story, but I can't definitively say it won't become something I want to explore. In that event, I will end this story at a suitable point and continue with a new story incorporating those codes.
I've been reading Stephen King's "Dead Zone" and I'm about a hundred pages into it after 2? 3 months or so. I read it in 1 or 2 page increments while waiting to do other things. My life is spent waiting, 3 minutes at a time. The book is fantastic so far and I really don't like Stephen King very much, so I'm surprised.
He's kind of a jerk.
...That I could turn on public comments for my stories. I should pay more attention. Since "Safe Place" has gotten a little trolled with a number of "1" votes, which hardly seems fair, but I'm admittedly biased...Anyway, I thought it might be nice to turn on public comments for that story and maybe get additional invaluable feedback. Every little bit helps.
I'm quite pleased with the story, myself. I think even if someone doesn't like the plot or characters, the technical skill should earn the story at least a "2", right?
Heh.
Safe Place is a romance which contains, to varying degrees, themes of FemDom, Cuckold, Cross-Dressing, and Cat Fighting. I did not code those into the story because there are no graphic depictions and none of those are what the story is about.
I ended up writing this because I've read some cuck stories recently and I just don't get it. I thought I would try to write one and I created the two characters that fit certain stereotypes of the genre, and I got halfway through and I put myself in Jimmy's shoes and I was like, there's no way this guy is going to do any of this.
I probably like Jimmy too much. He's in a wheel chair, can't use or feel his legs or genitals, he has panic attacks, he takes a drug with some very bad side effects for men, impotence, reduced sex drive, negligible sperm count...Taking those pills is killing whatever's left of his manhood. And yet he has self-respect, and I even made him a cross-dresser, you know, just trying my best to get him in a position where he has to submit to his girlfriend's dominance... and he says no. He's still a man and not for sale.
He's my hero...and so is Lisa, to a certain extent. She's willing to be brutally honest because she does respect and love Jimmy, but doesn't understand that if she cucks him against his will, she destroys what she loves. She's blind to that, despite her great strength, whereas Jimmy understands immediately and I think he's really trying to protect Lisa as much as himself, and it's a sacrifice when he has to let her go. She's his safe place and he kept his self-respect, but he's now living without a net. He's put himself in more danger.
So that's the long, boring version of why I wrote this story and I posted it just because I like it. I don't care what anyone else thinks. I like it and I want it out there.
edit - i found a couple painfully obvious errors in grammar that I had to fix. OCD is a bitch.
I have opted to include all the story codes with the first chapter. There is a possibility that I may have overlooked a few, but if that's the case they will not be the sort of codes that most readers would consider "extreme" and will fit naturally within expectations.
School has recently started for me, or resumed would be more accurate, and so my time management skills are being tested. I would anticipate a few days between consequent chapter posts and I appreciate your patience.
Thank you.