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A long time ago in a land far, far away, a young combat engineer lieutenant had a very bad day. Sometimes not ALL the scars are on the outside. Now he's out, gainfully employed and a friend's sideline project has him working with a university orchestra. Here's this one girl. No reason for a connection, but one happens. she finds out about him. And he finds out about himself.
Size: 954 KB (178,617 words)
Genre: Romantic
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Consensual, Romantic, Heterosexual, First, Oral Sex, Petting, Geeks

Review by smokeaknz   [other reviews by smokeaknz]

Reviewed:


Would I upset people if I said: "Goddamn! This story just keeps getting better and better"?

Oyster50 has done a few stories that I followed for a while, but then dropped as they became repetitious. This story is completely different from those others.

We have two protagonists from different sides of life, but with two common threads: they have some experience with the army, and they like music. This story tells how they become very close, and very happy. There are a few excellent puns, a few excellent jokes, and a plot with twists and turns. It's sappy in spots (hey! he bills it as a romance - what do you expect?), but never becomes treacle.

There are moments of excitement, and moments of pain. Oh, and there is a sailboat.

So it fills many of my preferred plot lines. The sex is good, but not get in the way of the plot or the character development.

Although I had liked it from the start, after this chapter (18) I just had to revise my score to a top rating.

Very strongly recommended.

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10

Review by BlackIrish   [other reviews by BlackIrish]

Reviewed:


Wow!

A seriously good story hiding in the debris that's been filling the SOL lists.

Not done so it's 'in progress' for those readers who need a finished story.

There's music (obviously), relationship stuff, sex stuff on the horizon, a few veterans' issues and some real emotions. Much more than happy/sad or base-level stuff as the author has clearly given this some real thought.

I almost forgot the red-haired girl - always a sucker for a red-haired girl/woman.

Mixing all those can be a lot so stay tuned and we'll find out if the author has the recipe.

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 8

Review by peregrinf   [other reviews by peregrinf]

Reviewed:


Oyster50, himself apparently an electrical engineer who travels a lot, relies on a comfortable, enjoyable formula -- older, single, gypsy electrical engineer rescues cute, super-smart teenage girl from dire circumstances. They have adventures and fall in love and have hot sex and get married and have more adventures and more hot sex.

There's more, but that, cut down to the bone, is his formula, and it is a good one. He writes well, they have hot sex, wonderful things happen. I like his work, formulaic as it is. He's even taken three of those stories and slowly brought them together into a single story sort of like you might braid a rope, but I haven't had the stamina to follow all three threads into the rope myself.

With Melodic Redemption he's broken the formula, sort of. The guy is younger (30) than his usual hero, a scarred Iraq vet dealing with PTSD (you do NOT want to get him riled), working, of course, as an electrical engineer, and with a buddy developing a super-computerized recording system built of off the shelf parts. The girl is older (21), a brilliantly talented (some things never change) flautist with a college orchestra. He meets her while he and his buddy are testing their system recording the orchestra, and love is in the air.

It's early yet (chapter 4) and that's about as far as the story has gotten (they aren't in bed together yet, but it's inevitable) and I'm not about to joggle the author's elbow while he's working on it.

I'm a sucker for romantic stories between nice people who enjoy a good relationship and hot sex. I'm also a sucker for plots that incorporate music and talented musicians (my fave so far being Paco Jones's These Girls Can Play) so this one looks to be a winner for me. Can't give it a stroke value yet, but I'm enjoying the premise immensely and looking forward to the next installment.

Now, if it only came with a soundtrack.

Plot: 8 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 9
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