I am only reviewing the first instalment of "Lottery Syndrome".
This is a "Dolcett" story which requires some suspension of disbelief about how the world works. Just like the "NIS" (Naked in School Stories) where for some reason educators and parents seem to think a school program where pretty girls flit around naked will be productive - It seems pretty far fetched but once you buy into how that world works it is usually a good story.
Lottery Syndrome makes the assumption you know how the Dolcett world works. In this one, girls are second class citizens who exist to amuse and ultimately feed the males of the world.
The family featured in the story is relatable, although because they exist in this fantasy world - what is normal to them would seem pretty far-out to the rest of us.
The first chapter focuses in journal form on a well-meaning husband who accepts/revels in this world and his wife who accepts it as completely natural (and their family). He helps you come to grips with his vision for this world through the use of "Georgie" a daughter who questions why it must be this way and has it explained to her.
I think that is a really good way to help the reader understand the rules of this story world.
As a writer, I think Grim Williams has a lot to offer - if anything because there is something exciting and different about his writing. I hope he will continue with this story, because now that he has set up some of the rules for the world - I think the next step is to flesh out the characters and give them some interesting challenges to overcome.
I like stories that centre on regular people in impossible situations. I think this is one of them and if you want something different to sink your teeth into - this has a lot of potential.