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Andy Drayton was having a hellish day and it looked to turn worse when he almost ran into a car on the highway. But then Regan Riley -- a girl light-years out of his league -- entered his life.
Size: 103 KB (19,737 words)
Genre: Romantic
Sex Contents: No Sex
Tags: mt/ft, Romantic, Slow

Review by manddscott   [other reviews by manddscott]

Reviewed:


A blog post from this author got me to looking at his works. I recall having read a couple of them quite a while back, so I thought it would be good to look at another one of his works. This short story, about a boy from the wrong side of the tracks and a billionaire heiress, hit the spot.

She is in her last semester of high school and decides to sneak out of the exclusive girls' academy that she attends, to enjoy a night out with friends. It seems Murphy was present for part of the night, as his law caused her to leave her phone and purse behind when she stowed away in a delivery truck trying to get to the city. Murphy departed just as the boy from the wrong side came to her rescue. The rest of the story is about her adventures and misadventures that evening and into the following day.

For such a short story, the author does a very credible job of building the plot, and it gets an A (8). In technical score, another A (8), as the very few errors (only 4 that I recall) are minute and do not really impede the story. For personal appeal, an A+ (9), as the story has just the right mix of romance and plot to move nicely.

Plot: 8 | Technical Quality: 8 | Appeal to Reviewer: 9

Review by Ivan_Ronical   [other reviews by Ivan_Ronical]

Reviewed:


After kicking off my SOL backlog with this, I now have type 2 diabetes but no regrets.

I think if I wrote a regular review for this it would end up being longer than the story itself, so I'll just say that this is a worthwhile read if you're looking to contract the diabetes. Also nice work to Jay Cantrell for another quality story!

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 9

Review by therev   [other reviews by therev]

Reviewed:


A not common way to tell a story, but this flows well. In the space of less than 24 hours, Andy & Regan have developed a deep relationship and he has kept her safe.

Has a confrontation with her mother & tells her a few home truths which endear him to Megan & her father.

6 months later they begin to re-establish their relationship and the story ends here, but with great promise for the future for them.

Very well done, and very readable.

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10
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