Reviewed: 2016-06-03 - (Review Updated: 2016-06-03)
This story threw me a bit for a loop. I started reading it, after its recommendation by another reader on SOL, expecting that I would be able to predict the story outcome within the first chapter. I was pleasantly surprised when that was not the case.
In this story, a widowed baseball pitching coach desperately needs a nanny for his two children. His stated preferences leave him with no viable options, and then a 24 year old writer is chosen as a last resort. This was the point at which I simply knew what the story would then entail. Like I said, I was wrong.
For plot, I give this story an A (8). There are a few small holes, but the author does a very credible job of not only fleshing out the story, but also of making their characters both believable and likable. The small twists in the plot also make the story fun to read.
For technical score, I saw very few mistakes, and believe it merits an A+ (9).
For appeal, although I enjoyed the story, I made the mistake of trying to read it in parts. After the first few chapters last night, I was too tired to continue reading, and put it aside. Another chapter or two this morning before I had to get to work, with another chapter or three while waiting for some clients. I finally finished it after getting home for the evening. Needless to say, that is not a good way to read what, in essence, is a medium length (15 chapters) story. I believe that spreading the reading out like I did diminished my enjoyment of the story. Some stories you can do that with. Others, not so much. I give the story an A (8), although it may have deserved an A+ (9). You can almost hear the characters' playful banter as you read the story, which is a very good quality in a story.