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Computer Based Seduction by Trouvere

Author's Description:
A married couple seduces an eighteen year old virgin who is teaching them how to use a PC.
Size: 23 KB ( ~ 4,361 words)
Genre: Erotica
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Reluctant, Heterosexual, First, Safe Sex, Petting

Review by Andrew Johns   [other reviews by Andrew Johns]

Reviewed: 2008-08-07

In "Computer Based Seduction", we have the story of an 18yr old girl that helps her older neighbors learn how to use a computer. After a fight with her boyfriend, she gets an education, as well. Read along to see how it goes.

The sex in the story was gentle and not described in vivid detail. As such, it wasn't much for stroke, unless you like your scenes described as such.

The plot itself was not bad. It was a bit of an interesting twist on a young woman's first time with an older man to show her the ropes.

Technically, the story was not very well written. Orgasm was spelled "organism" early on, really throwing me out of the story. The grammar wasn't the best, though punctuation was fairly good.

Overall, I didn't enjoy this story too much. The poor technical score threw me out of the short immersion, and the fact that the older couple wasn't well described meant it was more up to the reader to create them.

A good run through with an editor would make this story much better.

Plot: 7 | Technical Quality: 4 | Appeal to Reviewer: 5