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I was twenty-five, single, and just starting my career when my friend and coworker Jim talked me into coaching his daughter's soccer team. It was an all-star team of high school aged girls who all wanted to play soccer in college. Just me and seventeen outstanding, highly motivated young athletes - what could possibly go wrong?
Size: 178 KB (34,985 words)
Genre: Erotica
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Ma/ft, Teenagers, Consensual, Romantic, Oral Sex, Anal Sex, Petting

Review by The Black Knight   [other reviews by The Black Knight]

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What can I say about this story? I'm unsure whether it was intended as a stroke piece or not, which would change my opinion of how successful it was. If it was a stroker, it came up a little short; if it was intended as a more 'serious' piece, it fared a little better.

Technically, while there were a number of flaws which an editor should have been able to catch - from typos to internal inconsistencies - it was still superior to much of what is available. The plot was pretty simplistic, which is fine for a stroke piece; it did develop eventually into something different, which was a good sign.

Personally, I was a little disappointed with the characterization; I just couldn't find any interest in any of the female characters, although I think the way TDK was able to make one of them so distinctly unlikeable was a success. Still, had I not chosen to review this story, I likely would have not finished it.

I would suspect those most likely to enjoy this story would be those looking for stroke with some occasional romantic elements. Those looking for pure stroke - and those looking for more romance - are best suited looking elsewhere.

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 8 | Appeal to Reviewer: 7
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