Melissa's Rite by A Strange Geek

Author's Description:
The Harbingers, the group of teens united against the Darkness in Haven, face a new threat. 15 year old Melissa, having gained a mysterious power as the result of a terrible prank that backfired, now seeks greater power to further her revenge. Was she the one foretold by Mara, the one they were not to attempt to stop? Or is something far more sinister going on?
Size: 1407 KB ( ~ 266,809 words)
Genre: Mind Control
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, mt/ft, mt/Fa, ft/ft, Fa/ft, Mult, Teenagers, NonConsensual, Mind Control, Magic, Paranormal, Incest, Mother, Son, Sister, Daughter, Humiliation, Oral Sex, Masturbation, Sex Toys, Squirting

Review by Andrew Johns   [other reviews by Andrew Johns]

Reviewed: 2008-02-06


In "Melissa's Rite", we journey back to the town of Haven, where the Darkness has found a new vehicle to use in its quest to gain greater traction in town. Melissa, a young woman that has been made fun of in the usual High School drama methods, gains access to the power, and starts to get her revenge. Can the Harbingers keep her from succeeding? Read along and find out.

The sex in this story is quite frequent, and often quite arousing. Even though much of the arousal is forced by outside factors such as mind control, the author makes it damn hot.

The plot itself is intricate, and brilliant. Building on the Haven series and a short story, this book moves the plot along nicely, while giving the readers another taste of our young heroes, the Harbingers.

Technically, there were no flaws that I noticed, which is typical of this author's work.

This story really requires reading of the preceding pieces in the Haven series to make it really go, as there are references that the reader won't get without it. And, it makes for a great continuation, as well as setting up a great next story. A story I am very much looking forward to.

Like almost all of A Strange Geek's works, this story can be read for stroke, but don't let the good stroke value fool you. This is a work of art.

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10

Review by Slowpoke   [other reviews by Slowpoke]

Reviewed: 2008-02-05


A Strange Geek helped us return to Haven with an erotic addition to the Town of Haven Universe. For those new to this Universe, I would read the Haven stories in this order: The House at the End of the Street, Now This Won't Hurt A Bit, Melissa's Initiation, and then Melissa's Rite. Note that all of the Haven stories involve magic and have some very dark overtones with characters frequently in dominant/submissive relationships.

On a timeline, Melissa's Rite picks up mere weeks after the end of Now This Won't Hurt A Bit. It's little surprise that we return to Haven and find the Harbingers (a club dedicated to fighting the dark magic that permeates Haven) already in the thick of things. I was pleasantly surprised that this story seemed to spend more time fleshing out the relationships amongst the Harbingers and exploring some of the subplots mentioned in the previous stories.

Yet there’s still plenty of eroticism. In fact, my only criticism of this story is the proliferation of sexual themes. True, I don’t see any way else of writing the story where people are controlled through sex. But there were times when it seemed like the women were constantly wet/orgasming. That said you can easily skip these paragraphs if it feels excessive without losing any real content.

In the aggregate the sex fits, the character ages/personalities seem reasonable, and the story is quite a page turner. I highly recommend Melissa's Rite to anyone looking for a quality erotic story.

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10