This is EXCELLENT Sci-Fi. Enough now to be believable and enough future to be plausible. I think Frank and Shiloh are totally believable. Along with the heavy handed action that befits a government too full of itself.
Yes there are a lot of "Leaps of Faith" but you must realize the character of the primary player.
If I say more it's a spoiler.
This is just simply an EXCELLE Sci-Fi short story that leaves a lot open for a sequel or follow-up.