Roomies - Beginnings by Patricia51


Description: Dateless one night, Kim and Pam take a bottle of wine and go out to where their fellow college students go parking. They discover something new about each other and their feelings.
Size: 17 KB ( ~ 3,224 words)
Type:
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: Fa/Fa, Lesbian, First, Oral Sex, Petting, School

Review by Andrew Johns   [other reviews by Andrew Johns]

Reviewed: 2006-09-13


In "Roomies - Beginnings", we have the story of two college women in the 60's that go parking at the local parking hot spot with a bottle of wine for company. Along the way, they find themselves closer than before.

The sex in the story was ok. The story was coded with "oral", but the only thing a mouth did was kiss on the lips, and a little sucking of a breast. I didn't find the sex scene to be arousing.

The plot itself is short and to the point, which probably is due to the fact that the story is the first (timeline wise, but not order of writing) in a series of stories involving the two women. As a stand-alone piece, it is a nice little story. It means more as part of the big picture, though.

Technically, the story doesn't fare as well. A few capitalization errors and some contraction errors were present. Nothing major, but noticable and distracting from the overall piece.

As an opening salvo to the series of stories, it was a fair start. If you aren't planning to read the rest of the stories in this series, however, I would skip this one. Not because it isn't decent, but because it would be like buying a book so you can read only the first chapter.

Plot: 5 | Technical Quality: 6 | Appeal to Reviewer: 5