The Princess and the Frog by DG Hear

Author's Description:
It happened on Halloween Eve. What would Mike do when given some weird choices? Read it and see what Mike does.
Size: 26 KB ( ~ 4,930 words)
Genre: Erotica
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Mult, Consensual, Romantic, Heterosexual, Fiction, Humor, Tear Jerker, First, School, Transformation

Review by Stormy Weather   [other reviews by Stormy Weather]

Reviewed: 2005-12-13 - (Review Updated: 2005-12-13)

DG Hear is one of the most talented writers here at SOL; always coming up with a twist on things. This time, there's a twist on an old story, "The Princess and the Frog".

The tale takes place in modern day on Halloween Eve and things are never the same for Mike and Pam.

Romantic with a touch of humor, this story is worth your time.

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 5 | Appeal to Reviewer: 8

Review by Andrew Johns   [other reviews by Andrew Johns]

Reviewed: 2005-12-13

In "The Princess and the Frog", the author has created a twist on that famous children's story. The premise itself was pretty good.

Meet Mike, the college quarterback, and Kayla, his head cheerleader boyfriend. Pam, the mysterious fat girl, meets him at a Halloween party, and tells him that she is his future wife.

Unfortunately for the reader, the writing quality is poor. Missing quotes making following the dialogue difficult, especially since you can never tell when Mike is talking or thinking to himself. Misspelled words, and poor comma use are also rampant.

The characters themselves are all bad stereotypes. The star quarterback dates the head cheerleader. The head cheerleader loves to fuck any guy she can. The football team has practical orgies. The fat girl that shows up, and turns out to be the quarterback's first (pre-teenage) love. She's cursed to be fat until she loses her virginity to her true love.

The sex was unimaginative and boring.

If you *really* like bare-bones stories with bad sex and a fairy-tale ending, with zero build-up and unlikeable characters, this story is for you. Don't read it for stroke, and don't read it for romance. They aren't there.

Plot: 5 | Technical Quality: 3 | Appeal to Reviewer: 4