Ted Miller had deflowered a young 14-year old girl, Hannah, that he was tutoring. Hannah realizes once she'd had her cherry taken that adult sex is something she's been waiting a long time for and she wants more.
Size: 10 KB (1,931 words)
Genre: Erotica
Sex Contents: Stroke Story
Tags: Ma/ft, Teenagers, Consensual, First, Oral Sex, Masturbation, Petting, Pregnancy
Review by Pleasure Boy 1 [other reviews by Pleasure Boy 1]
Reviewed:
Tom is one one of the more prolific writers on SOL, at a whopping 96 submissions. He could stand to invest more quality in his stories though.
This particular story, while it was technically well done, with few typos and grammar mistakes, in the end was rather flat and a little too generic for my tastes. Hannah was your stereotypical adventurous teen slut, and Ted was simply a cock on which she acted out her scenes.
The sex itself was rather steamy, but that made it a little worse in that a fourteen year old girl would not really be that adept simply from overhearing locker room talk, as Tom suggested. The sex might have been even sexier if it were more realistic - if Hannah, was clumsy, awkward, unsure of herself, and all but completely ignorant of what was really going on. Instead she comes across as a seasoned veteran in the sack and this, while it would have been appealing for any other character, simply killed Hannah's realism for me.
On the plus side, Tom captured some very sexy snap-shot moments in the actual sex acts. These moments, if propped up by more thorough investments in story and characterization, would have made for a truly excellent story.
I sent Tom a rather lengthy email outlining the suggestions I have for improvements to this and other stories he writes. Hopefully he takes these suggestions to heart and improves in his next few works.
