When I started to get into story writing seven years ago, one of the most frequent advice I got was: 'You need conflict and drama'.
This story has none of those. Only someone like Don Lockwood could pull off a story that was so sweet, I contracted diabetes while reading it. And yet, despite the lack of artificial drama, it is simply impossible to stop reading it once you're past the first paragraph.
I think Don Lockwood stories should be mandatory reading for all aspiring authors.
There is a warning on this story about it being unbearably sweet. In the best possible way, I agree with the warning. If anything it is an understatement.
This is NOT a stroke-story.
It IS an underdog gets the girl story, and also a redemption story.
And I don't see any way possible to read this story WITHOUT liking it a whole lot.
The description of this story includes the following:
"Warning: do *not* eat anything sweet while reading this story. You *will* go into sugar shock. And, yes, it *is* supposed to be this sweet and sappy, OK? *grin*"
This is an understatement. I think it would be more correct to say that this is the sweetest, sappiest story on all of SOL, and I mean that in the best possible way.
As with many of the author's stories, this one features heavily the motif of salvation - here we see it in the main character. Starting off at a low point in his life, essentially going day-to-day with no real enthusiasm, we get to see him as he begins his journey with making his first real friend, a football player: "Quarterback demolition a specialty." I found this to be a bit touching, especially given the way the main character explains his previous experiences with athletes.
Meeting the girl is really only the first step here in the main character's journey, and his development and change is portrayed effectively throughout. It's not just him, however, the girl also has some demons to work through.
I don't remember much of anything wrong in terms of grammar or technical stuff, so full marks there.
Stroke-wise, this is another one to probably avoid if you're hunting it in huge amounts. It's there, it's well-written and hot, and it happens fairly often, but the story would be mostly unchanged without it.
A great read.
THE BEST DAMNED SPORTS(SEX) STORY.
It's a one part coming of age and one part underdog gets the girl plus some decent heat and a bunch of sports.
Brendan comes out of his shell at college and gets the girl. She helps him put away the traumas of high school and he helps her be everything she can be.
You can't not like this story. You'll cheer for the good guy and tear up at the challenges and successes.
This one is not about the sex, which is there just not everywhere.