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The lives of the Graham and Lewis families change forever when they win the state lottery. Follow these two families as their children come of age.
Size: 5102 KB (984,708 words)
Genre: Incest
Sex Contents: Much Sex
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Review by orangeade   [other reviews by orangeade]

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A lot of things happen in Dark Vision's "The Lottery." That's not surprising; it's one of the longest stories on the site. But just how satisfying a reading experience to which all those things add up depends upon the kind of story the reader seeks.

"The Lottery" is the tale of the Graham and Lewis families. Don Graham and Marc Lewis became friends in high school. Don dated and married Marc's sister, Marge, and Marc did likewise with Don's sister, Anne, although each of the four learned about love and sex from interactions with each of the other three (squick alert: read those story codes).

The two wives delivered baby boys a day apart. Two years later, each gave birth to a daughter, giving the two generations a decided symmetry. And though "The Lottery" follows the sexual adventures of both generations, it's greatest focus is on the younger one, taking place over a six-month period in which the teenaged members of the family are experiencing sexual and emotional awakenings, and, not surprisingly, following in their parents footsteps.

Dark Vision does a good job of creating interesting characters, which is a good thing, because this is not a plot-driven story. It's about a series of relationships, an almost day-to-day recounting of the emotional growth of the Graham and Lewis children. As cousins, they can't date as their parents did, and new boyfriends and girlfriends quickly enter the picture. But, in the end, what emotional ties will be the most important?

It's interesting that Dark Vision would have named the story "The Lottery." Certainly, the multi-million dollar lottery that Don Graham won a few months before the first chapter begins is a character in itself, albeit in the background.

But this is not the typical erotic lottery story in which the protagonist surrounds himself with women and makes all his dreams come true. Oh, to be sure, there's wish fulfillment involved here, particulary in the area of boats and sport fishing. But Dark Vision infuses his characters with a likeability born of their not losing their Midwestern middle-class values (not to mention their offbeat but enlightened attitudes toward sexuality) because of their new riches.

Unfortunately, this doesn't help the plot, because there's so little conflict. Although the lottery was won by the Grahams, the money is clearly shared between the two families. The children move to an exclusive private school populated by the rich and snotty, but there's no chance that they'll give in to temptations or have their values perverted because they've just been raised too well. Admirable, yes, but it's a blow to developing compelling story lines.

What that leaves is the relationships in which the four teenagers find themselves. Dark Vision does an excellent job of choreographing a core group of characters that quickly grows to 16, between new friends for both the youngsters and the adults.

So, does "The Lottery" succeed as a relationship piece? For the most part, yes. There is a "sameness" to the characters that runs through a good part of the book, but Dark Vision differentiates them over time, to the point that the teenagers go through a lot of ups and downs in the final two dozen chapters. Most of it is reasonable, but there is one important revelation in the very late going that two of the characters have about their feelings for each other that comes completely out of left field, and smacks of an author simply trying to make all of his characters line up a certain way without doing the legwork to support it.

Dark Vision is a better story teller than a writer, and "The Lottery" would have benefited, and have been much shorter, with the aid of an aggressive editor. With the day-to-day nature of the telling, the author spends far too much time detailing the mundane aspects of life. We don't need to know who cleared the table after each meal or the details of each change of clothing, and at times in a story this long, there's a tendency to skim passages for that reason.

But if you keep reading until the end like I did, it will probably be because you like the characters enough to find out what happened to them. For people who enjoy romantic incest stories, this is a must-read. Sibling incest in the world of the Graham and Lewis families is practically a rite of passage, and the author hits emotional and passionate peaks when writing about the relationship shared by the Graham children, Jack and Kim.

"The Lottery" ends fairly abruptly, but Dark Vision has already taken up the story again in the ongoing "Unique Adventures," in which the Graham and Lewis families are brought together with the characters of another epic-length story, "Lady Guinevere." Apparently, there's a lot of fishing involved . . .

Plot: 8 | Technical Quality: 8 | Appeal to Reviewer: 8

Review by fuzzywuzzy   [other reviews by fuzzywuzzy]

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Somewhere between a short story and a Saga lies the novel. My wife says that a novel with less than three hundred pages just doesn't make it. The characters are shallow, the scenery is limited, and the main plot and sub plots are less than perfect. And I constantly proclaim that there is nothing as good as a sexy love story.
And this are it! As I usually say.
And again I will not waste my time Reviewing an Incomplete and Inactive story. So back to Dark Visions tour de force about a family who share in a fantastic first prize in a State Lottery that could destroy another loving group of people because of the inter-sibling rivalries that could occur.
Don and Mark are brothers who are married to sisters, Marge and Anne. They have a unique love life because brother and sister share spouses, and the multimillion dollar proceeds from the lottery.
Jack and Kim are brother and sister, and so are Sally and Tom. And they share the same tendencies to love in the same way as their parents.
And we the readers are allowed to read about the trials and tribulations of these loving families, until they all realize that true love once found is forever!
I must say as well that the editing and proofing is remarkably professional which adds to the enjoyment of the reading. And if you like boats and deep sea fishing it also adds to the fun of reading!
Enjoy!

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10

Review by 54vette   [other reviews by 54vette]

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Dark Vision should not be this author's Nomme De Plume. It should actually be "Bright Vision". Why? Because his approach to incest and sibling love is steeped in just that...LOVE!!!

"The Lottery" has been around for at least a couple of years now. The story is about an honest, hard-working, mid-western, blue-collar families that ended up winning the lottery. Unlike those born rich, the parents of these set of teens instilled the value of "earning your keep".

You can see how they indulge their children, but the teens don't act like spoiled children. They're very mature and their whole approach to sex and love stems from a night of spying on their respective parents and seeing them interact sexually.

From there the teens explore their own curiosities and end up learning sex from each other. There are two families, two teens in each family. A brother and sister. Coincidentally, the males are the older sibling, leaving the sisters to be the younger ones.

Dark Vision has given them, each, a very unique personality and as the story develops, so to do the characters. They fall in love with others yet, they keep rooted to their love of each other.

It's a genuninely "good feeling" sort of story and one can tell that DV loves his characters.

I highly recommmend this story to all of you. I'd also like to recommend "Lady Guinevere". The theme is much the same but it is handled so well. It keeps the readers interest and develops as nicely, (if not better) than this one.

Enjoy!!!

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 9 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10
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