I have not got many responses to the story "Jenny's Ordeal." Most of the comments were that it was too long, and people are not willing to wade through something that long.
I wrote it in parts because it would take too long to load up and go through it.
Return to River Bend is a shortened version of an episode that was inserted into "Jenny's Ordeal."
In hindsight, I have left out physical descriptions of the two main characters that would have been nicer to have included.
I would appreciate any comments; good or bad about the story.
It seems that the story seems to be too long?
Actually the 55 chapters are almost all stories that stand alone(?)
Jenny's husband is temporairly disabled. The family is under incredible financial distress. Jenny is forced to take a job with a manipulative owner of a marketing firm. He makes an incredible amount of money and gains clients based on his sexual manipulation of Jenny. It is either submit to him or their family will be homeless
Since the story was getting long, I wrote another story to introduce Jenny's mother and daughters. That part was arbitrairly inserted into the main story. It could have been inserted anywhere.
Starting about chapter 14, Jenny, her mother and daughters are defiled on a trip to Barcelona. After they get out of it, Jenny's mother and one of the daughters go to a little town in Nebraska, where the grandmother has slowly built a respectable life for herself.
There are more attacks and debasement along with being kidnapped and taken to Mexico to work in a whorehouse.
They finally escape and go to Canada, where they live in seclusion, like fugitives in the witness protection program.
The part about Jenny's mother (Ginny) and the grandaughter, goes from chapter 14 through 40.
My favorite scene is in chapter 26, where the grandmother (Ginny) is forced into an exhibition sequence in a public restaurant that would make Sharon Stone's scene in "Basic Instinct" look like a children's story. See what you think!
After chapter Forty, the story switches back to Jenny and her husband. Her husband, who starts out as a devoted and loving husband, soon grows resentful at Jenny's business sucess, and starts putting her through his own torment to test her commitment to him. Unknown to Jenny, her husband is making money on her indignities.
The story ends with her having to submit to the indignities of her boss and her husband.
I think that it all ends well financially)for all the women... or does it?
Let me know whether you like it or not, and why? I don't know if I am good enough to improve it by rewriting it. The goal was to create a provacative story with a plot and lots of sex.
I have posted more than thirty stories. They all have the same theme, with the circumstances of the main character changing. The first one was Jenny's Ordeal." I wrote that one with the idea that it would be the only one. There was no feedback or comments. It was over 150,000 words long. I think people just couldn't wade through all of it. I wrote a few more that had the same theme, but much shorter. There seemed to be more comments on them.
For the readers who liked the story about "Jenny's Party Disaster," and wanted more chapters, you can probably get all of the options I can think of so far from "Jenny's Ordeal.
I, myself, am not intrigued by stories of incest, cheating, violence, or other forms of deviant behavior. The theme I have covered is pretty much most of my fantasy.
I think I could write some interesting true stories of visiting "Adult Theatres" and the booths with "Glory Holes," but it seems those ideas have been covered many times.
The Kaufman Center For The Performing Arts opened just recently. I think it cost about $400,000,000 to build.
It was designed by Moshe Safde, who designed the "Habitat" project in Montreal for the 1960 World's Fair. I went up to see that. When the Kaufman Foundation opened, I went to see it. There were 50,000 people who stood in line during a slight drizzle of rain to get inside. The line snaked back and forth around several blocks. Once we got close to the theatre, the line criss-crossed back and forth several times.
There was a woman who was in her middle thirties, to middle forties in a line facing me. As the lines moved, we passed each other. I only saw her for a minute or so.
She had short black hair, high-heeled, suede boots that zipped up the sides. She had a dark form-fitting very short dress that buttoned down the front. She had either "panty hose"(?) or black "tights"(?) with a similar ribbed pattern.
We never had the opportunity to talk. She never even looked at me. There are many, many young women who looke like her, but she stood out in my mind and I will probably never forget that look.
I have used this memory and image for the basis of most of the stories that I have written and posted.
I believe that these kind of "ordinary" women who may never have been rated "spectacular" in their youth, get "Lifetime Achievement Points" for being trim and attractive going into mid-life, after raising children, working, and been through so much of life's problems.
During the recent Final Four NCAA Tournament, I was in Lawrence, Kansas on a Saturday afternoon. There must be some kind of un-written dress code among young women that dictates: Nobody shall appear in public without wearing short, short cut-off jeans, or dress of similar length.
They were fabulous! Still, not very many will look as good as my "Jenny" when they are of a similar age.