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Flipping the script

Jedd11

OK, here's my idea. If it has been done before I haven't seen it. If it has, please let me know here where to find it. And even if it has, it can certainly be done again.
I love coming of age stories. And to look at the awards, many others do also. Nick Scipio's Summer Camp, Bluedragon's An Ordinary Sex Life, and MichaelLouck's A Well Lived Life, are all Clitorides award winning tales. While over on Literotica, despite their ridiculous over eighteen age restriction for completely fictional stories, (a complaint for another time), Party of Five by VertigoJ, Just the Six of Us by Mentalcase, and the Milf List series by Contrasting, are all highly popular and top rated stories.
But what I would really like to see is a story of this ilk with a female lead. Why don't I write it? Simple. I can't. I can write, but it's all technical. I used to make spending money in high school and college writing essays and term papers. But translating that to fiction, especially erotica, has eluded me.
So I turn to the readers and writers of SOL. Look, in three decades of reading and watching erotica, I have seen a handful of scenes/quotes that have stuck with me. A few of these include: An early seventies movie where a woman is seducing her niece and has said niece fingering her whispers "Use your tongue", and she does! In a late eighties film, a woman is moving on her brother's girl friend. She is in somewhat of sixty nine position using a vibrator on her. She slowly maneuvers her pussy in front of the girl's face. "Don't ask me to do that" states the girlfriend. To which the boy's sister replies "Go on. You can do it". And she does! Back on Literotica, in a story by carl_a entitled Four Sisters Unite, the sisters are having a toy party. Two sisters are already working individual dildos. The saleslady gives the third a remote vibrator, three complains it doesn't work. She is slammed back as it turns out number has the control. She laughs, turns it off, and drops her skirt, sitting on the couch. When three lunges for the control, she is now dropped to her knees again with the remote, now at four's feet. Removing her panties, four says, "I don't think I need a toy", and places her hand on three's head, drawing her in. And she does!
So recently I have read on SOL a story entitled Twice Lucky by JoeJ. It is a do over story where a man dies and his spirit inhabits a young boy's comatose body. But once you get past that, it is another great coming of age tale. But while I really like the story, I have to honestly say I am most intrigued by his oldest sister, Debbie. And she also had one of those classic lines. Seems our hero has an ardent admirer. She was a candy striper, the first person he saw out of his coma. They are taken with one another. But Cindy, the candy striper, wishes to remain a virgin until marriage, though she says our hero, Jake, will be the one to take her cherry.
But Debbie, whom Jake has already bedded, has realized in her sexual awakening with her brother, that she is bi. And has strong tendencies to seduce and dominate meek submissive girls/women. Cindy is quite curious, thinking lesbian sex is an acceptable alternative to saving her cherry for Jake. After both girls discuss it with him separately, Jakes states he has no problem with it.
One night, with multiple girls over for a sleepover, Debbie is discussing sleeping arrangements with Jake. The visiting girls are sent off to different sisters' rooms. Conveniently Cindy will sleep with Debbie. Alone with Jake, Debbie informs him, "I think your little Cindy is dying for me take her. Laurie (Cindy's best friend who Debbie has already tamed, and has her own sexual relationship with Cindy), says she loves to receive attention, but is hesitant to give it. That will change tonight". And it does! Jake later peeks in at Debbie's request to find Cindy happily lapping away, while Debbie uses her pigtails as reins, guiding Cindy where she wants her. Wow.
In a later scene, Jake and Debbie are discussing her love life. She mentions how great it is. She now has Laurie, Marisa (another conquest), and Cindy pleasing her, with Cindy delighting in her submissiveness. Debbie then tells Jake, "I think I'm going after Maria (a family friend milf) next. She looks like a deer in the headlights when I push her into the wall and take liberties. But she never resists. I'm working on Mom too, but subtler. I think she will be even more pliable than Maria". After Jake expresses skepticism about the submissiveness of the two milfs, Debbie assures him she is right, and invites him to try himself. Later, Jake indeed have his mom, and Debbie has her dominating way with Maria, Maria learning to eat pussy for the first time. Holy cow!
I ramble about this because I think Debbie could have had more of her story told. Yes, Jake is the main character, but she was a strong supporting character up until this point. And she is shown to be the bodyguard for Jake and his family in later life, but really appears in what amounts as cameos. I would have loved to hear more of her conquests of submissive girls interspersed, including giving her mother her first, like she did Maria.
Now JoeJ hasn't posted since 2009, and not added to Twice Lucky since 2004. So I think sadly for whatever the reason may be, he probably won't be back. And while I have already admitted I would love to see Debbie more fully developed, it's just pretty damned hard for someone to take up another's story, even if with the original author's blessing. So as much as I would love this, I don't know if it could/would happen.
But surely, aith all the talented authors out there, someone could write a story in this vein. A coming of age story with a female as the main character. I would think a female author might have a better point of reference, but I don't preclude a male pulling it off. A bisexual girl's tale like that floats my boat. If it involves a family member it rocks my world. If it has a girl using other, little submissive girls it begs my pardon. And if it combines all the above it plows my garden. You get the picture.
So there you have it. I fully understand that authors do not write just for me. But this is the forum for ideas and suggestions. And as for the credit issue, I don't need it. My reward comes in the form of a well written story of this type. Any Clitorides awards, and there very may very well be, are your own.So I am throwing this challenge out there. A girl's coming of age story. A lengthy comprehensive tale in the vein of the aforementioned tales. But again, with a female main character. If I can offer any more info or assistance I can be reached at holtmark791@aol.com. Is there anybody out there who can pull it off? Man I hope so! Best of wishes and thanks in advance.
Jedd

Replies:   tendertouch  tendertouch
tendertouch

@Jedd11

See Janna Leonard's stories. In particular Nollie and, IIRC, Hannah. I know there are others out there but they're escaping me at the moment.

tendertouch

@Jedd11

A quick page through my downloaded stories netted Don Lockwood's Heroes, Cindy for Sin's Close to Home (unfinished), LindaB's Passing of Seasons (unfinished), rlfj's Memoirs of a Young Victorian Lady, Sea-Life's Walker Between the Worlds, Tammikinz's My Little Sister and, it could be argued, The Night Hawk's Once More With Feelings.

Jedd11

Tendertouch, thanks for the info, but it wasn't quite what I was looking for. I read a few of your suggestions, and don't get me wrong, they were enjoyable reads. But I was looking, and hoping someone could write, something on the epic scale as the stories I mentioned, just with a female lead.
Party of Five was the smallest with 20 chapters, and it was abandoned unfinished. Just the Six of Us had 30. Summer Camp, An Ordinary Sex Life, the Milf List series, A Well Lived Life, and Twice Lucky, all have multiple books with multiple chapters. I'm looking, and again hoping very much, some talented writer, maybe an up and comer looking to make a name for themself, can take up the challenge and pull it off. I'm serious when I think this could win a Clitorides. I just write too boring too do it myself.
I appreciate your suggestions though, and plan to read some more. They are nice little reads, even if they are a bit short. Thanks for the input.
Jedd

Replies:   Geek of Ages
Geek of Ages

@Jedd11

I'm serious when I think this could win a Clitorides.


Any concept could win a Clitorides, if done well.

Jedd11

Very valid point. But it has been my observation that coming of age tales seem to do exceptionally well. Though as you said, they must be done well, as the mentioned stories were. That's why I thought an up and comer might want to give it a shot. A proven concept like that, if they can pull it off, could get their name out there. I just know I couldn't do it. My writing, while good technically, is too wooden and boring. Readers would boo me off the site. Once they woke up that is. Lol. Thanks for the reply.
Jedd

Jedd11

GOA, actually come to think of it, I have read some of your stories. While not the epic tomes I referred to in this post, I really enjoyed some, particularly the Hitchhiker series, which I had always wished there was more coming. Your plant story was a bit twisted though. Lol. But you did state that up front. While I agree with your profile that readers should read what they wish, I have never understood some readers who see what the story is about, proceed to read the story, then complain about the content. Why did you read it?! You knew that! Anyway, good to hear from an author I have enjoyed here. And thanks for the response.
Jedd

Replies:   Geek of Ages
Geek of Ages

@Jedd11

Thank you; I appreciate learning that people enjoyed my stories.

I, too, have wished for more female-narrator coming-of-age and especially do-over stories. I've even contemplated a couple concepts for them, though it would require more commitment than I'd be willing to give.

My I, Newbie series is a distillation of some of my thoughts, though: while it's not a true coming-of-age series or a real do-over, it *is* about an older man who becomes a teenage girl and has to deal with life like that. It's a pretty niche appeal, though, and I've no idea if I've coded it at all reasonably. But it might be kind of up your alley in that regard.

However, the authorship on this site skews extremely heavily towards old and male, which is why we don't get much from a perspective that hasn't been done to death.

Jedd11

Geek of Ages, you are quite welcome. I have always felt readers should give due to writers they enjoy, especially when it's free as many of this site's stories are.
I will try your I, Newbie story. As you said, it sounds like a niche tale, but I will check it out. Actually I am not generally a fan of do over/time travel, but something about Twice Lucky made me continue reading. And once I suspended that belief and just read about his life and loves, ( and his sister Debbie's), I really enjoyed it.
I see your point of authorship skewing towards older and male, but while I think a female author may have a better perspective writing my longed for female coming of age story, I don't discount a male pulling it off. I would certainly give it a read, even if I stopped after a couple chapters.
Finally, in reference to another unfinished series, I have a question directed towards you. The town of Haven series by A Strange Geek is another of those not normally my cup of tea, but yet I couldn't stop reading. I know it's a long shot, but I have to ask. A Strange Geek and Geek of Ages are a couple unusual nom de plumes. Any chance you are the same person, are related, or at least know each other? Again, I know it is unlikely, but I just felt I'd throw that out there and see if it stuck. That is one more series that desperately needs finishing. Thanks for writing.
Jedd

Replies:   Geek of Ages
Geek of Ages

@Jedd11

There's always a chance, but as I do not broadcast my business here into my public sphere, there's little opportunity to learn of such coincidences.

Jedd11

Lol. Duly noted. I'll just say that if you do fit one of those categories, the town of Haven is in sore need of a return visit. Lots going on in that town. Very interesting things indeed.
Jedd

Jedd11

Hello SOL world. I noticed the thread hadn't gotten a comment in a while, so I just wanted to keep it fresh in the public eye. Briefly, an author going by JoeJ wrote a story called Twice Lucky. Give it a read, as imho, it is an awesome, well written tale, with plenty of hot monkey sex.
Our hero has an older sister named Debbie, however, who actually interests me even more than Jake. My plea is for someone to take up her POV. Let us hear of her life, sex and otherwise, before Jake occupies her brother's body. Let us hear of her affairs, from her first, to her times with Jake, to her awakening of her bisexuality, to her realization she has a talent for identifying meek, submissive girls/women, to her conquest of said women, including Laurie, Marisa, Cindy, Maria, and hints at her mother, younger sister, distant cousins who were discovered, and others perhaps not mentioned. Perhaps even taming Jake's wayward daughter and others.
JoeJ has not posted to this since 2009. Clearly it is an unfinished tale. I have seen in some places, though I cannot verify this, that after five years of abandonment, an author's story is fair game to be finished by another. Again, I don't know the validity of this.
But what I propose would not even encroach upon that. I dearly hope for some to write, not a continuation, nor even a sequel, but rather a spinoff from Debbie's POV. Honestly it is a tale yearning to be told. Short of that though, just a coming of age tale from a female POV. In my original post, I listed several such stories and their authors which have garnered a ton of reads and awards. Clearly this type of story is very popular, but is always done from a male perspective. Now I don't discount a male could possibly write the story, but I would think it logical a female writer would have more insight.
So how about it people, especially you lady authors? Is this type of epic coming of age tale, with all its angst, drama, growth, and yes, hot monkey sex, within your wheelhouse? I'm hoping someone can answer the calling. Thanks for listening.
Jedd

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