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oldegrump

MC has Taken a Job as a small town police chief in Nevada on a temporary basis. Fights corruption officers, has Oriental Girl friend Dies while sitting on his porch in the end.

Replies:   JohnBobMead
limab

Shamus Journals by terriblethom

oldegrump

Not the one, but thanks

MC takes Job on the premise that it is temporary and hands it over to a friend. Girlfriend Slaps him and he leaves her. Motor pool supervisor is being blackmailed.

oldegrump

OOPS you were right, I just didn't see anything familiar in the first chapter

Thanks

Replies:   docholladay
docholladay

@oldegrump

I have read it at least twice and found it definitely worth reading.

burlarr
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He a retired marshall or officer if i remeber right, his friend with 2 daughters moved out and takes over as chief and builds a house on his land.

JohnBobMead

@oldegrump

Dies while sitting on his porch in the end.


The ending has always stuck with me. I mean, it _does_ finish the story. But it just occurs, nothing indicating heart problems prior to that. Then again, that does happen in real life; my grad school roommate died a couple of years ago of a heart attck while on a bicycling trip. So I'm of mixed emotions concerning the ending. But it was pretty well wrapped up at that point.

docholladay

@JohnBobMead

The ending has always stuck with me.


I think it was a blood vessel that was in the brain that burst or something. He had at least one major head injury when he had a fight with one character earlier in the story. I can't recall when that fight occurred how ever.

skyview
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@JohnBobMead

Deleted original answer someone supplied the same answered.

Ernest Bywater

@JohnBobMead

But it just occurs, nothing indicating heart problems prior to that.


I felt the ending was very mundane and it came across as if the author had just got fed up with the story and chopped it off. However, I think the death by embolism was telegraphed with the time in hospital after the fight in the casino and he got beat up by the huge bad guy. Due to the issue about the treatment and long time in hospital I could see that was going to be an issue again later, but then it just suddenly went bang at the end. I felt as if the cause had been set up, then just applied when he got fed up with the story. Terriblethom is usually a lot more involved with his story endings, so that one left me feeling flat.

Replies:   limab
StarFleet Carl

@JohnBobMead

But it just occurs, nothing indicating heart problems prior to that. Then again, that does happen in real life;


Yeah, it does. Walking along last week, then woke up in a small pool of blood with EMS around me. Get my heart valve replacement surgery in a couple of weeks.

Replies:   sejintenej
sejintenej

@StarFleet Carl


Yeah, it does. Walking along last week, then woke up in a small pool of blood with EMS around me. Get my heart valve replacement surgery in a couple of weeks.

Best of luck; my brother (by adoption) had three done in one go when he was in his seventies and was fine afterwards for many years

As for blood you don't say why / how. I cut my finger on a mandolin three weeks ago - was still bleeding when I changed the dressing a couple of days ago - and I don't have high blood pressure. Sh*t happens

limab

sejintenej
That REALLY doesn't sound good. Bleeding after 3 weeks is . . . problematic. And I will end THIS topic here. It is your business.

limab

@Ernest Bywater

It happens even without injury. Singer Laura Branigan complained of headaches for a several weeks and then just never woke up - Ventricular brain aneurysm.

When my Father went in for bypass the doctor who was going to operate was busy with an aortic dissection - no previous history.

But I also agree it seemed to be a very abrupt ending.

Still it won't keep me from reading his work :)

Replies:   Ernest Bywater
Ernest Bywater

@limab

It happens even without injury.


I now it can, but in the scene in hospital after he wakes up they mention the treatments and concerns about. When I first read that I started wondering when that was going to come back to cause trouble.

samuelmichaels

@JohnBobMead

The ending has always stuck with me. I mean, it _does_ finish the story. But it just occurs, nothing indicating heart problems prior to that. Then again, that does happen in real life; my grad school roommate died a couple of years ago of a heart attck while on a bicycling trip. So I'm of mixed emotions concerning the ending. But it was pretty well wrapped up at that point.

Ditto. It was telegraphed, and it wrapped things fine, but I wish he just let the novel end with a fade -- which would allowed me to imagine him and his friends live HEA. I enjoyed the book, but have not reread it for this reason.

One of my pet peeves -- I don't like authors writing epilogues where they sum up a few decades of the main characters' life ending with an obituary. I'd rather they left it open -- leaving their future life to my imagination, and also allowing the author to write future adventures if he decides to do it.

Replies:   Ernest Bywater
Ernest Bywater

@samuelmichaels

I'd rather they left it open -- leaving their future life to my imagination, and also allowing the author to write future adventures if he decides to do it.


every time I did that I got a deluge of emails about wanting a sequel or what to have in the sequel etc.safer to kill the sucker and end it.

Replies:   JohnBobMead
JohnBobMead

@Ernest Bywater

every time I did that I got a deluge of emails about wanting a sequel or what to have in the sequel etc.safer to kill the sucker and end it.


Arthur Conan Doyle tried that, but in the end they waved too much money under his nose and he talked his way around Holmes' death.

Replies:   Ernest Bywater
Ernest Bywater

@JohnBobMead

Arthur Conan Doyle tried that, but in the end they waved too much money under his nose and he talked his way around Holmes' death.


Yeah, well I got a lot more characters, and no one is waving big bucks at me - except for the very eccentric giant up the road who uses large adult male deer as clubs.

Replies:   docholladay
docholladay

@Ernest Bywater

Yeah, well I got a lot more characters, and no one is waving big bucks at me - except for the very eccentric giant up the road who uses large adult male deer as clubs.


Its why I leave it to the writer/storyteller to decide on sequels. But I will admit for a mainstream (paper) author. Sales can force them to continue writing sequels since that is how they earn a living. So if sales are high enough, they probably will try and write a sequel at least until the sales drop.

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