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Murdered parents, boy is buried under them, aliens help him

ttom

I usually bookmark stories I might like to read again. Missed this one.
The boy is found and sent to grow up in Texas. Eventually his 'dog' finds him.
His parents were murdered by a member of a powerful family in California.
Your help is appreciated!
ttom

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Hmel

"Human Phoenix" and "Human Man" by Refusenik

richardshagrin

See Refusenik's

Human Phoenix
Coming of Age
A Human Story (1)
You can't hide from your past forever, but it's easier if you're a foster kid in rural West Texas. Scott MacIntyre was different in more ways than even he knew, but he had a plan.
Tags: Science Fiction, Mystery, Violent, School, Military
Sex Contents: No Sex
Posted: ‎12‎/‎7‎/‎2012‎ ‎5‎:‎50‎:‎50‎ ‎PM Concluded: ‎12‎/‎27‎/‎2012‎ ‎9‎:‎00‎:‎00‎ ‎PM /

waldandav

Human Phoenix by Refusenik

ttom

Bingo!
Thanks to you three, much appreciated!
now, if anyone ever wants to find a story I read...
(Hasn't happened yet)
Regards,
Ttom

Wheezer
Updated:

It might be worth noting that Refusnik rewrote Human Phoenix to remove much of the alien element/Murderer element. IIRC, the original story had an older soul placed in the murdered kid's body.

From his blog: "The primary difference is that the re-posted version eliminated the first two chapters, and two related conversations in subsequent chapters. More words were actually added in the revision than were taken out, but some of the subtext did change.

I blogged about it extensively at the time, but in short - I eliminated the first chapter middle-aged dying guy, the talking thing in the bathtub, and the aliens speaking to the character."

Replies:   John Demille
John Demille

@Wheezer

From his blog: "The primary difference is that the re-posted version eliminated the first two chapters, and two related conversations in subsequent chapters. More words were actually added in the revision than were taken out, but some of the subtext did change.


The story is enjoyable, but once he removed this alien element a lot of things stopped making sense. Like if you had a talent from when you were a baby and you grew up with it, you wouldn't find it weird. When the main character in the second book was relieved when the aliens took away the powers was very odd to me. Like being relieved somebody took away your right arm. He grew up with those talents, they were part of him, he's not supposed to feel that way about them.

A nice example of something similar was in this Sunday's episode of Ray Donovan. Ray asks a woman 'you remember things from when you were four?' and she gives him a puzzled look and answers 'I remember everything. You don't?'

Why would anybody question how they are themselves?

I thought the original version with aliens and the transformation made a better story, although the writing in that first chapter was terrible.

Replies:   Wheezer  Ernest Bywater
Wheezer

@John Demille

I thought the original version with aliens and the transformation made a better story, although the writing in that first chapter was terrible.


I agree. I'd like to re-read the original.

Ernest Bywater

@John Demille

I thought the original version with aliens and the transformation made a better story, although the writing in that first chapter was terrible.


I prefer the current version. You have a bit of tantalizing info about the possibility of aliens right at the start, then he's got some odd abilities which show something odd. When the dog turns up you really start to wonder about alien involvement. I feel a lot of the tension is lost with the clear alien knowledge up front.

Replies:   samuelmichaels
samuelmichaels
Updated:

@Ernest Bywater


I prefer the current version. You have a bit of tantalizing info about the possibility of aliens right at the start, then he's got some odd abilities which show something odd. When the dog turns up you really start to wonder about alien involvement. I feel a lot of the tension is lost with the clear alien knowledge up front.


I prefer the current version. First, the original version really didn't use any skills or memories from the "old soul", so the setup was largely a waste.

[Spoilers]

The story makes it clear that the main protagonist wants more than anything to be normal, and is keenly aware when he does something weird. A Pinocchio motif, if you will.

In addition, many of his skills develop gradually, as a result of a failure in the "suppression mechanism", so they weren't as natural as using one's arms.

Overall, I am disappointed that the MC gave up on the special skills, although it fits with the story arc. On the other hand, there is a subtle and ambiguous hint that the skills may not be quite gone.

[/Spoilers]

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@ttom

maybe noble by acolodude....

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