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Bondi Beach

From a published short story with vigorous use of adjectives. I think I'll keep the list handy. (And, for what it's worth, the author repeated only two or three and those only two or three times.)

rigid
burning
raging
long
wet
growing
naked
lush
hard
spuming
slumbering
rich
fat head
beefy
naked
big hard
inflamed
throbbing
aching
eager
stiff
throbbing
dripping
oozing head
strutting
pulsing
enormous
hard driving
hardest vibrant
smooth
flushed
hairless
bald
open
aching
pampered
alluring
wet
frothing
sweet
clasping
flesh-filled
frothing hot
swollen

Replies:   graybyrd
graybyrd

@Bondi Beach

What! No "turgid" ... ??

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Bondi Beach

@graybyrd

What! No "turgid" ... ??


That's an important omission. Thanks-I'll just append it to the end of my list, the one I keep by my side while writing.

Apparently he had limited use of the "T" key.

For what it's worth, the story is, admittedly, barely a step above "Stroke," i.e., the plot can be summarized as "He's hot for her, she's hot for him, and then they get it on and live happily ever after," but it's polished and engaging. Which is the way we say "hot" in literary circles when we're discussing, er, erotica.

bb

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graybyrd
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@Bondi Beach


and then they get it on and live happily ever after


What's often called a 'reciprocal' relationship? The old in 'n out, back 'n forth, up 'n down, double-acting reciprocating love machine?

I'm holding out for the countra-rotating clockwise/counter-clockwise double helix rhodium rod version, myself. With turgid cylinder wipes.

Replies:   Bondi Beach
Bondi Beach

@graybyrd

I'm holding out for the countra-rotating clockwise/counter-clockwise double helix rhodium rod version, myself. With turgid cylinder wipes.


Turgid cylinder wipes ...

Kind of puts Walter Mitty's old "pocketa pocketa" to shame, doesn't it?

bb

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Crumbly Writer

I'll have to remember this list for my next children's story, "Mr. Bunny Goes to Market".

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graybyrd
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@Bondi Beach


Kind of puts Walter Mitty's old "pocketa pocketa" to shame, doesn't it?


It was originally "pocketa pool pocketa pool" but Thurber's publisher forced him to cut the pool. The rest is history ...

graybyrd

@Crumbly Writer

"Mr. Bunny Goes to Market".


Children, our new word for the day is fecundity.

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