When we talk "show don't tell" I frequently say I want to be immersed in the story. I want to live it through the characters. Well here's an article that talks about 51 things that break a reader's immersion. Don't worry, it's not a "show don't tell" discussion.
The author says:
Now, I'm not a monster. I don't close the book on the very first misplaced comma. It has to be something that actually distracts me from the illusion that I'm inside the story world, watching the events unfold. And I don't just stop at one, either. I tally up three such immersion breaks before I pull the plug. Then I do my best to explain why it broke my concentration.
As many readers have been quick to point out, it's important to remember that these are only the issues that I myself have reacted to, and I am well aware that in this IOD series, I am a harsher critic than most readers are likely to be. But I have another class of correspondents who tell me that they trip over exactly the same issues I do, and many writers will want to take note here, because these correspondents tend to be submission editors, slush pile readers, and professional critics-the very gate-keepers of the publishing industry who writers are trying to impress. So if you want to run a quick "polish test" before you submit your own work somewhere, I hope you'll find this list a helpful guide.
Anyway, I thought you might be interested in it, especially because he gives specific examples. Here's the article: