I just submitted the first part of a story called 'Party Favours' for posting. It follows a teenage girl called Carmen during the early 1800s and her older brother, Timothy, who controls her. She always listens to him due to her adoration and fear of him, and tries to find out why he's changed from the nicer person he used to be into such a scheming, controlling person. However, it takes two blows jobs, her virginity being taken with an audience, and Tim's intoxication to find out.
When I first had the idea and planning for this story it had a slightly different vibe than what it has now. I'm not sure if I portrayed the siblings' relationship quite the way I had originally wanted it--it was only a feeling I got at the time. I may change it if I get the right feeling again, but the basic planning and concept is there. The characters don't feel quite right, though.
Maybe I should be listening to what inspired in the first place as I write it to get that vibe--Lana del Rey's "Carmen."
But please let me know what you think of the story so far, anyway!
I will be trying to update Youth Retreat and The Lesson as well, and I would appreciate more feedback on them!
Thank you. :)