The editor who I will not name because I have read more tha a few stories he worked on. Looked it over said it was a good outline but the story in fact needs a lot of work. To edit the story he would have to totally rewrite it. What I will do is what I should have done in the first place post my story and go on. I tried to work with an Editors more than once to please the critics. Well after being insulted asking me if English is my native language, I no longer care. If what I post is to hard to read please stop hurting yourselves, trying to read my posts. My feelings will not be hurt on the matter. I will post both stories between now and in the morning. To may god bless you, and have a nice day.