After Chapter 2 there were several readers who commented on the lengths of some of the soliloquies. They felt they were too long without a break in paragraphs. This is the type of constructive criticism I am looking for. It helps me to grow as a writer. Chapter 3 was written and to the editor before I received those comments hence it does not reflect a change in style from Chapter 2. I am looking at Chapter 4 and modifying it based on the comments received and the lessons learned. Thank you all for your help, please keep it up.